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What was your favorite subject at school? Describe it and explain why this subject was your favorite one. v.1

What was your favorite subject at school? Describe it and explain why this subject was your favorite one. v. 1
Every individual around the world, the information is a crucial element used to progress or develop in their respective field. So many people want the information to access easily and quickly. Few people do not believe in having an open source for getting vital informative ideas. On the one hand, acknowledging and progressing for a company or an individual can be done only with the help of feedback of others, in the form of information. For example, the company had launched a product in the cosmetic industry, and the feedback from the customer will make the institute to decide to make an advancement in the present product or else to create a new product. Industries like a business, academic universities are need of data for analysis for their pros and cons. Moreover, if the information is an open-source, other individual from any part of the world will try to follow the same foot-path to reach success. This kind of thing leads to healthy competition among people with better quality. On the other hand, value-added information cannot be an open-source for everyone, because it may end up in a bad result. For instance, the military facts of any country would not spread as an open-source to everyone, and it only reaches the higher authorities of that particular government. If this kind of information has access to everyone, the terrorist or the enemy country can have a chance to defeat that country. Likewise, the country's scientific research is carried out by them, and the information about the research should not inform others because they want their name in history for inventing or discovering anything. The vital facts have to be in a closed box with limited people to access. To conclude, the weight of the facts should have an analysis before we start to spread it. I believe that the information has to reach the public if the effect of that result has not ended up in bad condition.
Every individual around the world, the
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information
is a crucial element
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used
to progress or develop in their respective field.
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So
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many
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people
want the
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information
to access
easily
and
quickly
. Few
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people
do not believe in having an open source for getting vital informative
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ideas
.

On the one hand, acknowledging and progressing for a
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company
or an individual can
be done
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only
with the
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help
of feedback of others, in the form of
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information
.
For example
, the
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company
had launched a product in the cosmetic industry, and the feedback from the customer will
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make
the institute to decide to
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make
an advancement in the present product or else to create a new product. Industries like a business, academic universities
are need
of data for analysis for their pros and cons.
Moreover
, if the
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information
is an open-source,
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other
individual from any part of the world will try to follow the same foot-path to reach success. This kind of thing leads to healthy competition among
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people
with better quality.

On the
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other
hand, value-
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added
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information
cannot be an open-source for everyone,
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because
it may
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end
up in a
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bad
result.
For instance
, the military facts of any country would not spread as an open-source to everyone, and it
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only
reaches the higher authorities of that particular
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government
. If this kind of
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information
has access to everyone, the terrorist or the enemy country can have a chance to defeat that country.
Likewise
, the country's scientific research
is carried
out by them, and the
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information
about the research should not inform others
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because
they want their name in history for inventing or discovering anything. The vital facts
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have to
be in a closed box with limited
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people
to access.

To conclude
, the weight of the facts should have an analysis
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before
we
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start
to spread it. I believe that the
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information
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has to
reach the public if the effect of that result has not ended up in
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bad
condition.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay What was your favorite subject at school? Describe it and explain why this subject was your favorite one. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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