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What was your favorite movie of the last year? Use details and examples to explain what you liked about the movie. v.1

What was your favorite movie of the last year? Use details and examples to explain what you liked about the movie. v. 1
Advancement is salient for a nation to keep moving forward and compete with other developed countries. However, there are predominantly two contrasting views where the government of the society vehemently deems that economic advancement should be the most valuable goal. The people, in contrast, believe that the other types of progress are equally valuable for a nation. On the one hand, to make sure that a country is competing on par with other countries, economic progression should be the goal. Moreover, if the economy is thriving, it will provide more job opportunities for the middle class and in turn, increase the employment percentage of the population. For instance, USA has the largest economy in the world and it continues to be one because of the incessant efforts of the US authority to focus on the economy first. On the other hand, the government's sole focus on the economic development will decline the progress of the country in other fields like the educational sector or the technological sector. Furthermore, for the youth of the country to grow and help in the economic development of the nation later in life, it is paramount that the educational progress receives the same amount of attention as the economical expansion. In my opinion, although, focusing on the economic betterment is a fundamental step to create more employment opportunities and reduce destitution in a country, it is essential to shift focus on a range of additional developments to grow the country overall. The governmental organizations should make sure that the education, technology, health and food sectors are progressing along with the economy of a country. In conclusion, there must be a balance between the economic and all the other kinds of growth to make a nation successful and prosper in every field.
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keep
moving forward and compete with
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other
developed
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countries
.
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, there are
predominantly
two contrasting views where the
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government
of the society
vehemently
deems that
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economic
advancement should be the most valuable goal. The
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people
,
in contrast
, believe that the
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other
types of progress are
equally
valuable for a nation.

On the one hand, to
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make
sure that a
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country
is competing on par with
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other
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countries
,
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economic
progression should be the goal.
Moreover
, if the
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economy
is thriving, it will provide more job opportunities for the middle
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class
and in turn, increase the employment percentage of the population.
For instance
, USA has the largest
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economy
in the world and it continues to be one
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because
of the incessant efforts of the US authority to focus on the
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economy
first
.

On the
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other
hand, the
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government
's sole focus on the
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economic
development will decline the progress of the
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country
in
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other
fields like the educational sector or the technological sector.
Furthermore
, for the youth of the
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country
to grow and
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help
in the
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economic
development of the nation later in life, it is paramount that the educational progress receives the same amount of attention as the
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economical
expansion.

In my opinion, although, focusing on the
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economic
betterment is a fundamental step to create more employment opportunities and
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reduce
destitution in a
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country
, it is essential to shift focus on a range of additional developments to grow the
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country
overall
. The governmental organizations should
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make
sure that the education, technology, health and food sectors are progressing along with the
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economy
of a country.

In conclusion
, there
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must
be a balance between the
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economic
and all the
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other
kinds of growth to
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make
a nation successful and prosper in every field.
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IELTS essay What was your favorite movie of the last year? Use details and examples to explain what you liked about the movie. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
296 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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