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What was the business model in your previous jobs?

What was the business model in your previous jobs? YdyxB
I worked in a small company that is established over 20 years ago. This company has a tradition approach which is familiar to most of the company In Vietnam. It focuses on advertisement and application areas. It steps one by one in the road to gain the customer’s trust. Therefore, the company receives increasingly numerous important projects. However, it cannot expand its scale because the chief just focuses on client in overseas, and he do not do business with the customer in country. On the other hand, this job requires a level of foreign language beside designer skills. In addition, because the company have 2 teams for day and night, as consequence it is difficult to hire employee for night.
I worked in a
small
company
that
is established
over 20 years ago. This
company
has a tradition approach which is familiar to most of the
company
In Vietnam. It focuses on advertisement and application areas. It steps one by one in the road to gain the customer’s trust.
Therefore
, the
company
receives
increasingly
numerous
important
projects.
However
, it cannot expand its scale
because
the chief
just
focuses on client in overseas, and he
do
not do business with the customer in country.
On the other hand
, this job requires a level of foreign language beside designer
skills
.
In addition
,
because
the
company
have 2 teams for day and night, as consequence it is difficult to hire employee for night.
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IELTS essay What was the business model in your previous jobs?

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