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What the period of school do you feel most important?

What the period of school do you feel most important? 5b7dQ
From my point of view, college is occupy an important position in period of school. First of all, university is an institution of higher education and research which offer high education and degree in a variety of accademic fields. So what makes university important? Research has found that college has many benefits. It is period to develop yourself. When we go to university we will not only learn normal knowledge but also learn in-depth knowlegde in your field. Moreover, university can help you eperience real life such as interships, club activities, etc. . The fact that college is like a miniature society in which there are many kinds of people: hard, nerd, lazy, funny, young, old, vv. . as can be seen that is an amazing enviroment to communicate with other different from you
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benefits. It is period to develop yourself. When we go to
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we will not
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IELTS essay What the period of school do you feel most important?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
133 words
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4.0
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