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What should we do to solve the housing problem in big cities?

What should we do to solve the housing problem in big cities? g5WB1
It is obvious that in big cities, the supply of houses is unable to meet the need for shelters. No matter how urgent it is, we still have some feasible measures to tackle this housing problem. Firstly, building more apartments instead of houses might help mitigate the issue about housing shortage. Since an apartment can accommodate a tremendously higher number of people than a house can, governments should encourage the citizens to buy flats rather than their own houses. The flats, therefore, should be fully and comfortably furnished as well as at an affordable price. Secondly, it is highly recommended that governments restrict the increase in population, which help decrease the excessive demand for houses. This could be done by limiting the number of children born in families. In Vietnam, for example, because of the large population, the government enforces the rule that each Vietnamese family must not bear more than two children. In conclusion, the housing shortage is becoming an acute problem in many cities. However, we can still address this problem with cited solutions.
It is obvious that in
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big
cities, the supply of
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houses
is unable to
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meet
the need for shelters. No matter how urgent it is, we
still
have
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some
feasible measures to tackle this housing problem.
Firstly
, building more apartments
instead
of
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houses
might
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help
mitigate the issue about housing shortage. Since an apartment can accommodate a
tremendously
higher number of
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people
than a
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house
can,
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governments
should encourage the citizens to
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buy
flats
rather
than their
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own
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houses
. The flats,
therefore
, should be
fully
and
comfortably
furnished
as well
as at an affordable price.
Secondly
, it is
highly
recommended that
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governments
restrict the increase in population, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
decrease the excessive demand for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
. This could
be done
by limiting the number of children born in families. In Vietnam,
for example
,
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because
of the large population, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
enforces the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rule
that each Vietnamese family
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must
not bear more than two children.
In conclusion
, the housing shortage is becoming an acute problem in
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many
cities.
However
, we can
still
address this problem with cited solutions.
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IELTS essay What should we do to solve the housing problem in big cities?

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  American English
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176 words
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