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what is your hobby? and why?

what is your hobby? and why? pLowa
For years, shopping was my only hobby. Sure, I did some other things, like going to the movies, taking walks, working out, and reading, but none of those pastimes occupied nearly as much of my time and attention as shopping. I have a list address of shops because each shop represents different styles like the mall, department stores, a market and local shops. However I like go shopping online. I think it is a part of the wave of the future because it is certaintly convenient and wide range of products to choose from online shop. I feel that I can relax me from my dizzes and saving a lot of time. Honestly, I’m an impulse shopper. I don’t usually try to catch on new fashion trends but whenever I have an eye for an item, I bought it without a second thought. Some people consider that shopping is luxuries, but I am of opinion that shopping online brings people a number of benefits. First, shopping online allows me to browse for products and checking prices between these online shops. In this way, I can make a better decision to buy what I like after taking prices, sizes and models into consideration. I used to buy an elegant dress at virtual shop, which was cheaper compared to some shops near my houses. Moreover, since there is a high demand of buying things online, I can realize my dream of starting up business and achieve success in the long rub. This can be seen as a positive trend because it creates good job opportunities for young people like me and thereby help improve my income and well-being. To sum up, I think that shopping is a great hobby which can help people overcoming their stress or even anxiety. It occurs because doing shopping will make I more relax and forget about my problems
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none of those pastimes occupied
nearly
as much of my time and attention as shopping.

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because
each
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represents
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different
styles like the mall, department stores, a market and local
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shops
.
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However
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online
. I
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it is a part of the wave of the future
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it is
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certaintly
convenient and wide range of products to choose from
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online
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shop
. I feel that I can relax me from my
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dizzes
and saving
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time.
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, I’m an impulse shopper. I don’t
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try to catch on new fashion trends
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but
whenever I have an eye for an item, I
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it without a second
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thought
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consider that
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is luxuries,
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online
brings
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people
a number of benefits.
First
,
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shopping
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online
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allows
me to browse for products and checking prices between these
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online
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shops
. In this way, I can
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make
a better decision to
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buy
what I like after taking prices, sizes and models into consideration. I
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used
to
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buy
an elegant dress at virtual
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shop
, which was cheaper compared to
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some
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shops
near my
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houses
.
Moreover
, since there is a high demand of buying things
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online
, I can realize my dream of starting up business and achieve success in the long rub. This can be
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seen
as a
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positive
trend
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because
it creates
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good
job opportunities for young
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people
like me and thereby
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help
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improve
my income and well-being.

To sum up, I
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think
that
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is a great hobby which can
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help
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people
overcoming their
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stress
or even anxiety. It occurs
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because
doing
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shopping
will
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make
I more relax and forget about my
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problems
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IELTS essay what is your hobby? and why?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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