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What is the reason for urbanization?

What is the reason for urbanization? Ry278
Urbanization refers to the migration of inhabitants from rural areas towards urban areas. This essay will discuss the main reasons for this phenomenon. The first reason prompting people to migrate into cities and towns that they have greater employment opportunities. Rural areas offer salaries too low to be able to cover their families, so people move to urban areas in search of a better life with a well-pay job. Moreover, industrialization brings the chance to work in many prospect sectors such as technology, hospital, education or business, so that people have much more options for their careers. The good quality of facilities and infrastructures and services is also another reason for this migration. More people are attracted to move to cities and towns in hope of better living standards. Urban areas provide better social benefits and services, better educational facilities, better health care which are unavailable in rural areas. The countryside almost cannot satisfy their basic need for education and health, while cities and towns can supply modern equipment for the hospital and educational institutions. As a result, people can access easily these convenient facilities.
Urbanization refers to the migration of inhabitants from rural
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towards urban
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. This essay will discuss the main reasons for this phenomenon.

The
first
reason prompting
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people
to migrate into cities and towns that they have greater employment opportunities. Rural
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offer salaries too low to be able to cover their families,
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move
to urban
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in search of a
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better
life with a well-pay job.
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, industrialization brings the chance to work in
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many
prospect sectors such as technology, hospital, education or business,
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that
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have much more options for their careers.

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quality of facilities and infrastructures and services is
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another reason for this migration. More
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people
are attracted
to
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move
to cities and towns in hope of
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better
living standards. Urban
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areas
provide
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better
social benefits and services,
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better
educational facilities,
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better
health care which are unavailable in rural
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areas
. The countryside almost cannot satisfy their basic need for education and health, while cities and towns can supply modern equipment for the hospital and educational institutions.
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can access
easily
these convenient facilities.
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IELTS essay What is the reason for urbanization?

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
185 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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