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what is the most important action for the government to take for the protection of environmental problems? 1- fund researches on new energy sources such as solar and wind power. 2- protect forests and natural wildlife species3- pass and enforce laws to redu v.2

what is the most important action for the government to take for the protection of environmental problems? 1- fund researches on new energy sources such as solar and wind power. 2- protect forests and natural wildlife species3- pass and enforce laws to redu v. 2
Many citizens believe that governments should fund researches on new energy sources and pass and enforce laws to reduce the pollution. They think that if the government can fund researches or enforce laws this will make the factories and other source of pollution insist to reduce the amount of pollution which it produced daily. Although i understand their point of view, i have a different opinion. I believe that the government should protect forests and natural wildlife species. Because the forest has impact on human health, and it has impact on global warming. First, a forest has impact on human health. For example, in some countries, they decide to remove many trees from the forests. Such action lead to decrease the nutrition of the soil, as a result the growth of many trees is highly affected, and that' s lead to decrease the amount of producing oxygen and taking green house gases. As a result the climate will not be healthy. On the other hand other countries try to do their best to protect the forest and the natural wildlife, by providing the soil with good nutrition which is necessary for trees growth. As a result their climate is perfect because they have tremendous amount of trees that release oxygen to the environment and take carbon dioxide. Therefore they have a healthier climate. And make the respiration process of the human goes better. Next, forests play a role in global warming. For example the cities that didn' t protect their forest lead to increase or decrease in the temperature of the planet because the forests can cool the planet by absorbing green house gases during photosynthesis, and they can worm the planet also because they are dark and absorb a lot of sunlight. As a result they have wide different climate. On contrary, many countries protected their forests, For example tropical forests play important role in global warming by cooling and warming the planet. as a result they have perfect weather. In conclusion, according to the reasons mentioned above, the government can resolve many of environmental problems by protecting the forest and wildlife species. Because the forests play role in human health and it has impact on global warming.
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can fund researches or enforce laws this will
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countries, they decide to remove
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will not be healthy.
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other countries try to do their best to protect the
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forest
and the natural wildlife, by providing the soil with
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nutrition which is necessary for
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growth. As a
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climate
is perfect
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they have tremendous amount of
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that release oxygen to the environment and take carbon dioxide.
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the cities that
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by absorbing green
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gases during photosynthesis, and they can worm the
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they have perfect weather.

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, according to the reasons mentioned above, the
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can resolve
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many
of environmental problems by protecting the
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forest
and wildlife species.
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49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay what is the most important action for the government to take for the protection of environmental problems? 1- fund researches on new energy sources such as solar and wind power. 2- protect forests and natural wildlife species3- pass and enforce laws to redu v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
369 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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