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What is the importance of music?

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Music work as a stress buster as it help to reduce stress. To be precise, now everyone preoccupied with their mundane affairs so that is why the feel lethargic due to which they listen music to relax themselves. Moreover, music play a vital role in marriages. To explain, playing music is an appropriate way to enjoy in parties and without music party become boring. Hence, people feel energetic in happy occasions.
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IELTS essay What is the importance of music?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
71 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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