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Many young people nowadays commit crimes

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Nowaday, crime rate is increasing rapidly and most of them are young people who is the key of future in the world. These is some of reason which can be answer why they become like that. Many teacher just think problem of studen is the joke or they just nauty and don't really care so that why have violent in school, which can made them going to be crime, therefore, main reason is the school not take care their children. Furthermore, young people nowaday fond of online game, which could be have violent in their; or they just make friends with bad guy and exposure to many bad things but young people are often very easily influenced, so in this, exposure to bad things is the reason why they going to the commit crimes
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Nowaday
, crime rate is increasing
rapidly
and most of them are young
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people
who
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the key of future in the world.
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some of reason
which can be answer why they become like that.
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fond of online game, which could be
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IELTS essay Many young people nowadays commit crimes

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
133 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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