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What is the Culture Shock ?

What is the Culture Shock ? Mwqjq
Culture shock, depends on the situation. It can be hard. Especially, if we go abroad. We don't know anything. Their culture, language, meal … We want back to home. Because we think, we are stranger in here. Then, we try learn their language. I think language harder than other thing. Because We can start a cook. We can learn other thing but, we don’t learn language easily. why is it hard learning language? The answer is, culture start language. All of the language has own quality. The culture inside the quality. For example, now I learning English. English has own modals, own expression. I'm looking different from as. Differences show the culture. On the other hand, we go to anywhere inside the own country. We can see culture shock. It is too different Anatolian and European in my country. Finally, if we learn other language. We don't live culture shock. We can live easily.
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Anatolian and European in my country.

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IELTS essay What is the Culture Shock ?

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
154 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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