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What important lessons did you learn as a young kid?

What important lessons did you learn as a young kid? G3xYB
The most important lesson I learned as a young kid was don't need to care about what people think of me. When I was young, I was obsessed with being perfect in the eyes of others. I tried to get good grades at school, to have a good appearance, always listen to adults. But I slowly realized that being praised for being a good kid didn't make me happy, it made me stressed. I let other people's judgments of me overwhelm my own desires, I felt lost and empty. Things started to change when I went to college, my parents no longer housed me as much as before
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lesson I learned as a young kid was don't need to care about what
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of me. When I was young, I
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grades at school, to have a
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appearance, always listen to adults.
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slowly
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for being a
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kid didn't
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make
me happy, it made me
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stressed
. I
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other
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's judgments of me overwhelm my
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desires, I felt lost and empty. Things
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IELTS essay What important lessons did you learn as a young kid?

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