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What impact does advertising have on? YLDMK
I think Advertising has the big influence and the effective which are unconscious for us, and advertising is things that people take for granted. Recently, we have some opportunities with various types of advertising. For example, when I lived in my parent's house, I saw advertising with newspaper every day, so I checked advertising to get nice products and my mother looked for items which we can get good bargain. Also, when I took a train or bus, I often noticed a number of advertising. There are some advertisingｓ which have every category. Additionally, I often watch YouTube, there are many advertising in the movie. Then I sometimes watch the advertising of all, and I was interested in their contents. I have never bought them, but they are going to be attention. On the other hand, advertising is too familiar things and we don't usually think about it. I think a lot of people aren't conscious about advertising, because numerous advertising exists in our daily lives. For example, when we watched TV, a number of advertising is flows in TV especially before noon or late at night. However, people don't see it more than dramas, news or variety show, so people are not very interested. Also, I think commercials are included advertising, so commercials are often not seen seriously. Therefore, advertising has an influence that we try to buy things. I think people are persuaded by advertising, because advertising has huge power to communicate a lot of information which we can get good things. I think we pay more attention to a number of advertising, so our life will be better and companies should be better advertising quality.
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influence and the effective which are unconscious for us, and advertising is things that
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people
take for granted. Recently, we have
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opportunities with various types of advertising.
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lived
in my parent's
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, I
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saw
advertising with newspaper every day,
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I
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checked
advertising to
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nice products and my mother looked for items which we can
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get
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good
bargain.
Also
, when I took a train or bus, I
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often
noticed
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a number of advertising
. There are
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advertisingｓ
which have every category.
Additionally
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often
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YouTube, there are
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advertising in the movie. Then I
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the advertising of all, and I
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in their contents. I have never
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them,
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they are going to be attention.

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things and
we don't
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about it. I
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a lot of
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people
aren't conscious about advertising,
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numerous advertising exists in our daily
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lives
.
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, when we
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a number of advertising
is flows in TV
especially
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before
noon or late at night.
However
,
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don't
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it more than dramas, news or variety
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,
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so
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people
are not
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very
interested.
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, I
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commercials
are included
advertising,
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commercials are
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seriously
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buy
things. I
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think
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people
are persuaded
by advertising,
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because
advertising has huge power to communicate
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a lot of
information which we can
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get
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good
things. I
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we pay more attention to
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a number of advertising
,
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so
our life will be better and
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companies
should be better advertising quality.
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IELTS essay What impact does advertising have on?

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
278 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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