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What do you think the model will be in your future job?

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I think, for my future job I will find a company which can grow up in its area. As new company, I will have more challenges, more opportunities and more benefits. This future company can grow up in their area. While the company is expanding, there will have a lot of seminars or conferences for employees. If I have a chance to be at these events, I can improve my skills, or learn somethings new. I think about an international company where I can use my foreign language. In addition, the company can organize a summer vacation or something like this for employees.
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which can grow up in its area. As new
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, I will have more challenges, more opportunities and more benefits. This future
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can grow up in their area. While the
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is expanding, there will have
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, I can
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, or learn somethings new. I
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about an international
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where I can
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my foreign language.
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can organize a summer vacation or something like this for employees.
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IELTS essay What do you think the model will be in your future job?

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  American English
1 paragraphs
103 words
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