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What do you think that famous celebrity should earn much compare to doctor and teacher? Whats your opinion?

What do you think that famous celebrity should earn much compare to doctor and teacher? Whats your opinion? Nw9ed
Nowdays it is obvious that most of highest paid people are the sports person and actors. Bsically in the mordern wolrd people easily get influenced by the famous people so that most of the barnd wants to spend more on them. However it is true that those people, whom are working hard to bulid the society always paid less. Firstly, if we look around in this modern world most of the people are looking for the so called celebrity and they are always following their life style.
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are the sports person and actors.
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influenced by the
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people
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that most of the
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wants to spend more on them.
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it is true that those
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, whom are working
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to
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the society always paid less.
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, if we look around in this modern world most of the
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are looking for the
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so called
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celebrity and
they are always following their life style.
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IELTS essay What do you think that famous celebrity should earn much compare to doctor and teacher? Whats your opinion?

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