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What do you prefer writing lengthy paper, giving presentation, or taking exam? Give details and examples to support your response. v.1

What do you prefer writing lengthy paper, giving presentation, or taking exam? Give details and examples to support your response. v. 1
It is well-accepted that university certificate or diploma is one of must accesses during many job applications in the current workforce worldwide; therefore, the majority of parents tackle to help their child or children be enrolled in one of the top universities.   While many people support that completing a course of the university will ensure a well-paid occupation, others claim that experience gained from work after school is more important to secure a good occupation. I tend to agree with the former. The essay will discuss the importance and necessity of completing a course of university education. To begin with, university education has been common among youngsters worldwide due to that curriculum composed for each subject is according to professional advices in order to meet the demand in the workforce. Therefore, completing a course in university will learn the basic skills and knowledges so that new graduates will be more competent.  For example, after graduating from university and obtaining a degree in accounting, graduates hired in banks or companies are competent in many basic skills, such as reading, writing and computer skills. Therefore, employers do not start to train them from the basic level. A diploma or certificate not only indicates the level of education, but also imply what kinds of knowledge and skills that graduates possess after completing all required courses. In addition, university courses provide a systemic approach in training the learners in all aspects. Some people advocate that experience gained during working are more important because hand-on experience is not offered by university courses; however, the skills learned as an apprentice not systemic and only focus on certain areas based on the jobs. For instance, working as an assistant after grade-12 diploma provides opportunities to master some skills, such as organizing skills, interpersonal skills or communication skills; however, some skills such as precise writing skills, analysing skills and appraising articles skills might need to learn through university courses. Allover, university courses will provide opportunities for learners to learn many basic skills which are necessary for their future careers. The courses will assist learners to prepare the tasks in workforce worldwide. Therefore, I support that before obtaining a full-time job in job work, it is necessary to earn a degree from university or diploma.
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certificate or
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diploma
is one of
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must
accesses during
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many
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job
applications in the
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current
workforce worldwide;
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therefore
, the majority of parents tackle to
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help
their child or children
be enrolled
in one of the top
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universities
.
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many
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people
support that
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course
of the
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university
will ensure a well-paid occupation, others claim that experience gained from work after school is more
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important
to secure a
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good
occupation. I tend to
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agree
with the former. The essay will discuss the importance and necessity of
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completing
a
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course
of
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university
education.

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with,
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education has been common among youngsters worldwide due to that curriculum composed for each subject is according to professional advices in order to
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meet
the demand in the workforce.
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,
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completing
a
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course
in
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university
will learn the
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basic
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skills
and
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knowledges
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so
that new graduates will be more competent.  
For example
, after graduating from
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university
and obtaining a degree in accounting, graduates hired in banks or
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companies
are competent in
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many
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basic
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skills
, such as reading, writing and computer
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skills
.
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Therefore
, employers do not
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start
to train them from the
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basic
level. A
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diploma
or certificate not
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only
indicates the level of education,
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but
also
imply what kinds of knowledge and
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skills
that graduates possess after
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completing
all required courses.

In addition
,
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university
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courses
provide a systemic approach in training the learners in all aspects.
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Some
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people
advocate that experience gained during working are more
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important
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because
hand-on experience is not offered by
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university
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courses
;
however
, the
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skills
learned as an apprentice not systemic and
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only
focus on certain areas based on the
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jobs
.
For instance
, working as an assistant after grade-12
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diploma
provides opportunities to master
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some
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skills
, such as organizing
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skills
, interpersonal
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skills
or communication 
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skills
;
however
,
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some
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skills
such as precise writing
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skills
,
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analysing
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skills
and appraising articles
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skills
might need to learn through
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university
courses.

Allover,
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university
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courses
will provide opportunities for learners to learn
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many
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basic
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skills
which are necessary for their future careers. The
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courses
will assist learners to prepare the tasks in workforce worldwide.
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Therefore
, I support that
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before
obtaining a full-time
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job
in
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job
work, it is necessary to earn a degree from
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university
or
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diploma
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay What do you prefer writing lengthy paper, giving presentation, or taking exam? Give details and examples to support your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
369 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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