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What causes people to migrate illegally?

What causes people to migrate illegally? 1VyaX
In political area, we use 'failed state' word for unsuccesful state. This states can't protect citizens and apply to rule. Also they are poor countries. Their citizens dont obey their rules so that anybody don't respect that's countries. Many local groups settled in that'scountries because they dont have power on their's citizens. After these situations, some innocient peoples decide leave that's country. They want to quality life, good education system, who childrens are growing in high social standard livings. But their country can't provide these standarts due to fact that it is in corruption and neopotizm. Due to corruption and nepotizm, many company dont invest these countires. On the other hand rich peole leave these country. Owing to the fact that they are consider money and invests. We talked life in failed states in the first paragraph. Why people want migrate to other countries? Firstly, some countries are failed countries because they can' provide security of their citizens. İf we look political books, they start with 'state is provide their citizens life under the state control'. But these countries couldn't these terms. Many terorist group generate under the these conditions and they are apply their rules. Furthermore, some peoples accept their rules. Therefore, this state is divide to subcountries. Central governmet wants solve these problem and start war between governmet and groups. Almost all of people want left country, they going to border. And start human tragedy.
In political area, we
use
'failed state' word for
unsuccesful
state
. This
states
can't protect
citizens
and apply to
rule
.
Also
they are poor
countries
. Their
citizens
dont
obey their
rules
so
that anybody don't respect that's
countries
.
Many
local groups settled in that'
scountries
because
they
dont
have power on
their's
citizens
. After these situations,
some
innocient
peoples
decide
leave
that's
country
. They
want
to quality life,
good
education system, who
childrens
are growing in high social standard livings.
But
their
country
can't provide these
standarts
due to fact that it is in corruption and
neopotizm
. Due to corruption and
nepotizm
,
many
company
dont
invest these
countires
.
On the other hand
rich
peole
leave
these
country
. Owing to the fact that they are
consider
money and invests.

We talked life in failed
states
in the
first
paragraph. Why
people
want migrate
to other
countries
?
Firstly
,
some
countries
are failed
countries
because
they can' provide security of their
citizens
.
İf
we look political books, they s
tart
with 'state is provide their
citizens
life under the
state
control'. B
ut
these
countries
couldn't these terms. M
any
terorist
group generate under the these
conditions and
they are
apply
their r
ules.
F
urthermore,
s
ome
peoples
accept their r
ules.
T
herefore,
this
state
is divide to
subcountries
. Central
governmet
wants solve
these problem
and s
tart
war between
governmet
and groups. Almost all of p
eople
want
l
eft
country
,
they going
to border. And s
tart
human tragedy.
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IELTS essay What causes people to migrate illegally?

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