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what can be done to discourage people from using their cars

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It is an undeniable fact that the increasing usage of personal vehicle may result in several harmful effects both for people and the environment, such as global warming and causing various long-lasting disease in human’s body like cancer. It should be an alarm for each society to cut down on using cars as much as possible to prevent these consequences. In this article I'm going to cite two solutions which may help people do this. Firstly, governments can set a particular limit for car travels. By that I mean, to announce a proper number of distance that cars would be allowed to go during a specific period of time, a year for instance. Provided that driving beyond this distance would lead the owner of the vehicle toward a considerable punishment. To my opinion, this method may make residents to manage their annual travels like how people in some countries do with their limited proportion of petrol during a month or a year. Another practical way is to make public transport system so convenient and economic that people may get more encouraged to use them instead of their own car. If airplane or train ticket will be much cheaper or more trip packages will be arranged, more people form whatever economic class can afford to purchase them. It is entirely understandable that this method can add a lot to the expenditure of a government. But there may be some techniques that would help authorities to make decisions that have the least drawbacks. In summary, it is true that driving personal cars have so many disadvantageous for our world and some noticeable actions should be taken. In my view, limiting the amount of distance of a vehicle throughout a year and promoting the quality of public transport system and lowering its fare can help people cut down on car usage.
It is an undeniable fact that the increasing usage of personal vehicle may result in several harmful effects both for
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people
and the environment, such as global warming and causing various long-lasting disease in human’s body like cancer. It should be an alarm for each society to
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cut
down on using
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cars
as much as possible to
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prevent
these consequences. In this article I'm going to cite two solutions which may
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help
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people
do this.

Firstly
,
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governments
can set a particular limit for
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car
travels. By that I mean, to announce a proper number of distance that
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cars
would be
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allowed
to go during a specific period of time, a year
for instance
.
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driving beyond this distance would lead the owner of the vehicle toward a considerable punishment. To my opinion, this method may
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make
residents to manage their annual travels like how
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people
in
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some
countries do with their limited proportion of petrol during a month or a year.

Another practical way is to
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make
public transport system
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so
convenient and economic that
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people
may
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get
more encouraged to
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use
them
instead
of their
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own
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car
. If airplane or train ticket will be much cheaper or more trip packages will
be arranged
, more
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people
form whatever economic
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class
can afford to
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purchase
them. It is
entirely
understandable that this method can
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add
a lot to the expenditure of a
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government
.
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But
there may be
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some
techniques that would
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help
authorities to
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make
decisions that have the least drawbacks.

In summary, it is true that driving personal
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cars
have
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so
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many
disadvantageous for our world and
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some
noticeable actions should
be taken
. In my view, limiting the amount of distance of a vehicle throughout a year and promoting the quality of public transport system and lowering its fare can
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help
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people
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cut
down on
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car
usage.

IELTS essay what can be done to discourage people from using their cars

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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