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What are the differences between the young and the old in choosing where to live

What are the differences between the young and the old in choosing where to live kxEEd
Well obviously, there are a number of potential distinctions here. However, I guess the most crucial would probably be that the youth are likely to live in metropolitan cities whilst the older people prefer to live in the countryside. To illustrate, city life not only benefit the younger’s future, creating a window of opportunity, and having a better standard of living but also provide an advanced healthcare system, access to schools and universities, and a modern mode of transportation. In contrast, the old people wanna live a peaceful retirement life which allows them to immerse themselves in nature and live in a calm and quiet place along with a close bond with neighbors. Therefore, they’ve always been dedicated to helping each other when they meet difficult situations.
Well
obviously
, there are a number of potential distinctions here.
However
, I guess the most crucial would
probably
be that the youth are likely to
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live
in metropolitan cities whilst the older
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people
prefer to
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live
in the countryside. To illustrate, city life not
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only
benefit the younger’s future, creating a window of opportunity, and having a better standard of living
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but
also
provide an advanced healthcare system, access to schools and universities, and a modern mode of transportation.
In contrast
, the
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old
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people
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wanna
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live
a peaceful retirement life which
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allows
them to immerse themselves in nature and
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live
in a calm and quiet place along with a close bond with neighbors.
Therefore
, they’ve always
been dedicated
to helping each other when they
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meet
difficult situations.
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IELTS essay What are the differences between the young and the old in choosing where to live

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
127 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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