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What are some of the reasons why people immigrate to another country?

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Nowadays, the vast majority of people immigrate to other countries. Referring to the statistics, over 281 million people migrated in 2020, nevertheless it is interesting to know the reasons as well as motives of those people. This essay will examine some potential causes for this issue. Firstly, it’s probably true to say that people immigrate to get an opportunity for quality life. They might be displeased with their salary along with inefficient education or desiring to change the country because of climate, people. Indeed, there can be many reasons, but a person is aspiring to find a high-paid job together with following a particular career path. For instance, many people are moving to the USA in hope to become renowned, make dreams come true or just feel freedom. Thus, well-being is the main reason for moving to other countries. Secondly, to my mind, it is for creating your new personality. Speaking about it, many people can be discontented due to being labeled by their relatives, acquaintances. In other words, the surroundings don’t change their opinion about you; they know your negative sides and vulnerabilities. People want to start life over, where others don't know them, therefore people can form new identities, explore new cultures and meet a wide variety of people. To sum up, people are migrating to other countries because of economic, social, environmental reasons.
Nowadays, the vast majority of
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immigrate to
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countries. Referring to the statistics, over 281 million
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people
migrated in 2020,
nevertheless
it is interesting to know the
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reasons
as well
as motives of those
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. This essay will examine
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Firstly
, it’s
probably
true to say that
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people
immigrate to
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get
an opportunity for quality life. They might
be displeased
with their salary along with inefficient education or desiring to
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change
the country
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because
of climate,
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people
.
Indeed
, there can be
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many
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reasons
,
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but
a person is aspiring to find a high-paid job together with following a particular career path.
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,
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many
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people
are moving to the USA in hope to become renowned,
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make
dreams
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come
true or
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just
feel freedom.
Thus
, well-being is the main
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reason
for moving to
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other
countries.

Secondly
, to my mind, it is for creating your new personality. Speaking about it,
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many
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people
can
be discontented
due to
being labeled
by their relatives, acquaintances. In
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other
words, the surroundings don’t
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change
their opinion about you; they know your
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negative
sides and vulnerabilities.
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People
want to
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start
life over, where others don't know them,
therefore
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people
can form new identities, explore new cultures and
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meet
a wide variety of
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people
.

To sum up,
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people
are migrating to
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other
countries
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because
of economic, social, environmental
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reasons
.
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IELTS essay What are some of the reasons why people immigrate to another country?

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