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Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money.

Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money. 7LAWX
Tourism is believed as a fast-developing sphere of life. While some people argue that tourism is predominant in having precious memories and experience, others consider it as a reason for a decrease in budget and time. This essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the first one. On the one hand, due to the rapid improvement in this sector of the economy, the price for goods, services, and housing is significantly expensive. In other words, people tend to pay two, three times or even more to obtain one product. Moreover, trips and tours require certain amount of time that can be used for learning new abilities, entertaining with the family and relatives. For instance, in France and Spain in just three days tourists can spend more than 1. 500 euros in average. On the other hand, tours and voyages provide travelers with the new breath and relaxation. Devoting time to travel can help to take a break from the routine of every day, school or work. It clears your mind and gives the refreshment. One convincing argument in favour of travelling is penetrating in different cultures and making new friends. In particular, features and novelties in different cultures, literature and languages open the mind, also fascinating adventures and acquaintances leave an indelible and pleasant trace. Taking everything into account, traveling captures the time and money necessary for an individual for his own needs. However, it seems to me that tourism is the source of priceless experiences and skills which can have tremendous and useful effect on the person.
Tourism
is believed
as a
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fast
-developing sphere of life. While
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some
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people
argue that tourism is predominant in having precious memories and experience, others consider it as a reason for a decrease in budget and
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time
. This essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in
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favour
of the
first
one.

On the one hand, due to the rapid improvement in this sector of the economy, the price for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
, services, and housing is
significantly
expensive.
In other words
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
tend to pay two, three
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times
or even more to obtain one product.
Moreover
, trips and tours require certain amount of
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time
that can be
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used
for learning new abilities, entertaining with the family and relatives.
For instance
, in France and Spain in
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just
three days tourists can spend more than 1. 500 euros in average.

On the other hand
, tours and voyages provide travelers with the new breath and relaxation. Devoting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
to travel can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to take a break from the routine of every day, school or work. It clears your mind and gives the refreshment. One convincing argument in
Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.
favour
of travelling is penetrating in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
cultures and making new friends.
In particular
, features and novelties in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
cultures, literature and languages open the mind,
also
fascinating adventures and acquaintances
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
an indelible and pleasant trace.

Taking everything into account, traveling captures the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
and money necessary for an individual for his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
needs.
However
, it seems to me that tourism is the source of priceless experiences and
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skills
which can have tremendous and useful effect on the person.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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