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Excessive use of mobile phones

Excessive use of mobile phones DoMYA
Many individuals have a notion that extreme usage of smartphones and computers affect youngsters’ literacy skills adversely. Due to a plethora of reasons, I agree to the above mentioned view pointTo begin with, too much reliance on electronic devices would always have a negative impact on their basic reading and writing skills. To put it simply, teenagers always communicate using informal language and short forms through their gadgets
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impact on their basic reading and writing
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skills
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simply
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teenagers
always communicate using informal language and short forms through their
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gadgets
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IELTS essay Excessive use of mobile phones

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
67 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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