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INTEGRATED WRITING, motivation

INTEGRATED WRITING, motivation 7LA03
the reading and the lecture are both about ways of motivation and an example of this because the reading is about what ways of motivation exist and listening gives an example of this. the reading talks about two specific ways of motivation, which are extrinsic and intrinsic, and explains each of them. The extrinsic motivation is how to obtain some reward you will do something, for example, money will motive to do something, is not only tangible rewards, it could be intangibles such as attencion, approval, applause, etc. While intrinsic motivation is when you don’t need an external reward for doing something, you do it for satisfaction, personal pleasure. But is possible if you have an extrinsic motivate for an action that already has intrinsic motivate, this could reduce, this reduction of motivation is called the overjustification effect. and the lecture gives an example of this, talk about maryn how as a teenager love to sing, she enjoys singing, she could sing every moment such as in family events, weddings, etc. when she grown up everyone always expects Maryn sing, even when she doesn’t want because she does not feel good, one day a person offers Maryn a contract to sing where she will earn a lot of money, she believes that the right thing to do is sign the contract because of that, so she signs the contract. both the reading and lecture are about the overjustification effect.
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, which are extrinsic and intrinsic, and
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each of them. The extrinsic
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is how to obtain
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reward you will do something, for
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, money will motive to do something, is not
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tangible rewards, it could be intangibles such as
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, approval, applause, etc. While intrinsic
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is when you don’t need an external reward for doing something, you do it for satisfaction, personal pleasure.

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, this reduction of
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overjustification
effect.

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how as a
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teenager
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, she enjoys singing, she could
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every moment such as in family
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events
, weddings, etc. when
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grown up everyone always
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Maryn
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sing
, even when she doesn’t want
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she does not feel
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good
, one day a person offers
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Maryn
a contract to
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sing
where she will earn
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a lot of
money, she believes that the right thing to do is
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sign
the contract
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of that,
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she signs the contract.

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both
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reading
and lecture are about the
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overjustification
effect.
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IELTS essay INTEGRATED WRITING, motivation

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
239 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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