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The bar grap show the total manufacturing

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The given line grap illustraties the manufacturing output proportionally in the countries of Asia Europe And the rest of the world. The Given data is Calculated in numbers Or figures. From an overall perspective it is apparent That the total manufacturing Production in Europe and Asia Was at rise While the rest of the countries experienced very slow increase in production. Meticulously observing the line grap, it is seen that 1840 the percentage of Asia’s manufacturing production was 50% while in 1880 it got declined to 30% and the later on, in 1920 it got decreased to 20% in 1960, it got inclined to 25% and in 2000 it peaked to nearly 45% whereas, 1840 to 1920 Europe experienced a proportional inclination from 40% to 50% while in the year of 1960 it got declined to nearly 38% and then on in 2000 it got decreased from 38% to nearly 29%. Further strengthening the same point of view, is it clear that in 1840 the total manufacturing production of rest of the world was 10% while from 1880 to 1960 there was an inclination in proportion of production of rest of the word which was 25% to nearly 38% whereas, in the year of 2000 it got decreased from nearly 38% to near about 32%.
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of the world. The
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Production
in Europe and Asia Was at rise While the
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of the countries experienced
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very
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that 1840 the percentage of Asia’s
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manufacturing
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production
was 50% while in 1880 it
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declined to 30% and the
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later
on, in 1920 it
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decreased to 20% in 1960, it
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inclined to 25% and in 2000 it peaked to
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45% whereas, 1840 to 1920 Europe experienced a proportional inclination from 40% to 50% while in the year of 1960 it
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got
declined to
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38% and then on in 2000 it
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decreased from 38% to
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29%.

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strengthening the same point of view, is it
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that in 1840 the total
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production
of
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rest
of the world was 10% while from 1880 to 1960 there was an inclination in proportion of
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of
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rest
of the word which was 25% to
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38% whereas, in the year of 2000 it
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38% to near about 32%.
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IELTS essay The bar grap show the total manufacturing

Essay
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