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Western immigration of Canada

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After reading the passage, particularly the third paragraph, I learned more about the formation of the diverse ethnic, linguistic and religions in Canada. In this paragraph, we can see that the majority of immigrants to Canada or Western Canada in the 19th century were mainly white English- speaking people from Europe and the United States. Because for English- speaking Canadian, British, and American independent farmers were their ideal immigrants. On the other hand, Jews, Asians, Roma, and Black people were at the bottom of the list on the grounds of racists. However, we can now witness the culture of many various places in Canada. For example, Chinese is the most common language besides English and French, which are two official languages. The number of immigrants from Asia and other parts of the world has increased steadily since the 1960s. For instance, the migrant of 60, 000 people from Vietnam, Cambodia, and Laos happened in the late 1970s. In the 1980s, there were 85, 000 immigrants from the Caribbean and Bermuda moving to Canada. To conclude, immigration has evolved significantly, and it is now the primary source of population increase in Canada.
After reading the passage,
particularly
the third paragraph, I learned more about the formation of the diverse ethnic, linguistic and religions in Canada. In this paragraph, we can
see
that the majority of
immigrants
to Canada or Western Canada in the 19th century were
mainly
white English- speaking
people
from Europe and the United States.
Because
for English- speaking Canadian, British, and American independent farmers were their ideal
immigrants
.
On the other hand
, Jews, Asians, Roma, and Black
people
were at the bottom of the list on the grounds of racists.
However
, we can
now
witness the culture of
many
various places in Canada.
For example
, Chinese is the most common language
besides
English and French, which are two official languages. The number of
immigrants
from Asia and other parts of the world has increased
steadily
since the 1960s.
For instance
, the migrant of 60, 000
people
from Vietnam, Cambodia, and Laos happened in the late 1970s. In the 1980s, there were 85, 000
immigrants
from the Caribbean and Bermuda moving to Canada.
To conclude
, immigration has evolved
significantly
, and it is
now
the primary source of population increase in Canada.
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IELTS essay Western immigration of Canada

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
191 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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