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Well, smoking has been one of the most consuming product that any industry can ever make, big amount of money is being made, over the years the health problems of smoking have risen to a high level dgree of concern people should try and take care of their health , their health is the most valuable asset anyone can ask for, lets consider the following methds of treating this kind of problems, everyone off course have the freedom to enjoy whatever habit he likes to do, having said that, it is also a critical problem to cuase health problems for other people, rules are the best possible way to handle this problem, smoking in a closed area is not allowed, as much as pets are not allowed inside the library we can not make a debate over allowing a pet inside the library just because it is a personal right, or in terms of freedom, some problems might occur just by letting ourselves do what we want, smoking is allowed only in the open public areas like parks, it has a lot of side effects t

Well, smoking has been one of the most consuming product that any industry can ever make, big amount of money is being made, over the years the health problems of smoking have risen to a high level dgree of concern people should try and take care of their health, their health is the most valuable asset anyone can ask for, lets consider the following methds of treating this kind of problems, everyone off course have the freedom to enjoy whatever habit he likes to do, having said that, it is also a critical problem to cuase health problems for other people, rules are the best possible way to handle this problem, smoking in a closed area is not allowed, as much as pets are not allowed inside the library we can not make a debate over allowing a pet inside the library just because it is a personal right, or in terms of freedom, some problems might occur just by letting ourselves do what we want, smoking is allowed only in the open public areas like parks, it has a lot of side effects t ddq7
Well, smoking has been one of the most consuming product that any industry can ever make, big amount of money is being made, over the years the health problems of smoking have risen to a high level dgree of concern people should try and take care of their health, their health is the most valuable asset anyone can ask for, lets consider the following methds of treating this kind of problems, everyone off course have the freedom to enjoy whatever habit he likes to do, having said that, it is also a critical problem to cuase health problems for other people, rules are the best possible way to handle this problem, smoking in a closed area is not allowed, as much as pets are not allowed inside the library we can not make a debate over allowing a pet inside the library just because it is a personal right, or in terms of freedom, some problems might occur just by letting ourselves do what we want, smoking is allowed only in the open public areas like parks, it has a lot of side effects to the national health rates it affects and makes great impacts on the number of poeple that end up lying in crowded hospital beds, i think if people find other hobbies that they are love to do, like painting, hiking, it will divert the attention from the cigars, one thing about the smoking is that it is a time conusming, something that makes time pass by, like if you are watching the football match that you have been wating for a long time and it turns out your team is losing, the only thing you might do next is to smoking just to let you get away of the unhappy events that you have been stuck too,
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IELTS essay Well, smoking has been one of the most consuming product that any industry can ever make, big amount of money is being made, over the years the health problems of smoking have risen to a high level dgree of concern people should try and take care of their health, their health is the most valuable asset anyone can ask for, lets consider the following methds of treating this kind of problems, everyone off course have the freedom to enjoy whatever habit he likes to do, having said that, it is also a critical problem to cuase health problems for other people, rules are the best possible way to handle this problem, smoking in a closed area is not allowed, as much as pets are not allowed inside the library we can not make a debate over allowing a pet inside the library just because it is a personal right, or in terms of freedom, some problems might occur just by letting ourselves do what we want, smoking is allowed only in the open public areas like parks, it has a lot of side effects t

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