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Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness. To what extent do you agree or disagree to this statement. v.5

Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness. to this statement. v. 5
Money are often tagged as a measurement of happiness. To some, wealth does not define happiness. I believe that there are merits to this statement, however, there are also factors that I do not agree with. First of all, happiness is subjective, meaning what makes you happy holds no value to others. This is because individuals have different perspective of what is meant by being happy. For instance, buying luxury cars, to some, this what makes them feel satisfied, but to others, having complete family is a true meaning of happiness. Finally, money cannot be regarded as a measurement of happiness. On the contrary, people who are affluent acquired happiness effortlessly. They can purchase anything they want in just a blink of an eye. Abundance of wealth, means being able to possess anything that they desire. For example, Kylie Jenner is being the youngest self-made billionaire. She is overwhelmed by what she has already achieved. Thus, this only dispels that money correlates to happiness. In conclusion, true happiness varies from every individual perception. It depends upon the a certain person to define their meaning of happiness.
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tagged as a measurement of
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happiness
. To
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some
, wealth does not define
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happiness
. I believe that there are merits to this statement,
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also
factors that I do not
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makes
you happy holds no value to others. This is
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because
individuals have
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different
perspective of what
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by being happy.
For instance
, buying luxury cars, to
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some
, this what
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makes
them feel satisfied,
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but
to others, having complete family is a true meaning of
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happiness
.
Finally
, money cannot
be regarded
as a measurement of happiness.

On the contrary
,
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people
who are affluent acquired
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happiness
effortlessly
. They can
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purchase
anything they want in
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just
a blink of an eye. Abundance of wealth, means being able to possess anything that they desire.
For example
, Kylie Jenner is being the youngest self-made billionaire. She
is overwhelmed
by what she has already achieved.
Thus
, this
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only
dispels that money correlates to happiness.

In conclusion
, true
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happiness
varies from every individual perception. It depends upon
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certain person to define their meaning of
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happiness
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness. to this statement. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
186 words
This writing has been penalized,
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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