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[We should discourage people to use cars]

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Personal cars have become an essential part of our life due to a variety of benefits it offers including easy access to different facilities and services, safety, freedom to travel, and comfort of the journey. However, these advantages come with a cost, and environmental degradations and traffic congestions are two major concerns. We can improve the public transportation system and gradually increase fuel prices to discourage people from using private cars while also invest in eco-friendly cars. Problems associated with increasing car use are huge, and its environmental impacts are a great concern for many. Automobiles are a big source of carbon dioxide emission and greenhouse effects and not to mention, air and sound pollutions in urban areas all around the world. Vehicle exhausts contribute to global warming, acid rain and many health-related problems. Climate change is already affecting millions of people's lives and hurting the ecological balance, and it is terrifying to think about what the ever-increasing vehicles on the roads would do to our planet in the future unless we do something to reverse it. Moreover, personal cars are the reason we face so horrendous traffic jam almost every day which kills our valuable time and negatively affect our productivity. To address these problems, some people suggest that the government should impose a strict restriction on car ownership and increase the tax on car purchasing to a staggering height. However, the mobility and flexibility of personal cars are essential in our life, and I am absolutely against taking any drastic measures. Rather, we should improve our public transportation facility to a great extent so that people prefer to use public buses and trains rather than driving. Another measure could be slowly increasing the fuel price that would deter many people from using and driving cars. Moreover, car manufacturers should invest in environment-friendly solar or hydrogen-powered cars to reduce the negative impacts of cars on the environment and the government should improve the roads to reduce traffic congestions. In conclusion, restricting the use of cars overnight might seem like a quick and effective solution, but practically speaking, it is not a proper solution. We want to use cars for the freedom of our mobility but have to come with eco-friendly cars to reduce their negative impacts.
Personal
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cars
have become an essential part of our life due to a variety of benefits it offers including easy access to
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different
facilities and services, safety, freedom to travel, and comfort of the journey.
However
, these advantages
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come
with a cost, and environmental
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degradations
and traffic congestions are two major concerns. We can
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improve
the public transportation system and
gradually
increase fuel prices to discourage
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people
from using private
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cars
while
also
invest in eco-friendly cars.

Problems associated with increasing
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car
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use
are huge, and its environmental impacts are a great concern for
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many
. Automobiles are a
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big
source of carbon dioxide emission and greenhouse effects and not to mention, air and sound pollutions in urban areas all around the world. Vehicle exhausts contribute to global warming, acid rain and
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many
health-related problems. Climate
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change
is already affecting millions of
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people
's
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lives
and hurting the ecological balance, and it is terrifying to
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think
about what the ever-increasing vehicles on the roads would do to our planet in the future unless we do something to reverse it.
Moreover
, personal
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cars
are the reason we face
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so
horrendous traffic jam almost every day which kills our valuable time and
negatively
affect our productivity.

To address these problems,
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some
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people
suggest that the
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government
should impose a strict restriction on
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car
ownership and increase the tax on
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car
purchasing to a staggering height.
However
, the mobility and flexibility of personal
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cars
are essential in our life, and I am
absolutely
against taking any drastic measures.
Rather
, we should
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improve
our public transportation facility to a great extent
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so
that
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people
prefer to
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use
public buses and trains
rather
than driving. Another measure could be
slowly
increasing the fuel price that would deter
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many
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people
from using and driving
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cars
.
Moreover
,
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car
manufacturers should invest in environment-friendly solar or hydrogen-powered
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cars
to
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reduce
the
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negative
impacts of
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cars
on the environment and the
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government
should
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improve
the roads to
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reduce
traffic congestions.

In conclusion
, restricting the
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use
of
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cars
overnight might seem like a quick and effective solution,
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but
practically
speaking, it is not a proper solution. We want to
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use
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cars
for the freedom of our mobility
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but
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have to
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come
with eco-friendly
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cars
to
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reduce
their
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negative
impacts.
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IELTS essay [We should discourage people to use cars]

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
377 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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