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We live in a world in which we are constantly exposed to advertising. To what extent does advertising influence our choices as consumers, and what effect does it have on our lifestyles? Discuss this issue and give your opinion. v.1

We live in a world in which we are constantly exposed to advertising. Discuss this issue and give your opinion. v. 1
Highlighting products an influential method to attract customers. A great deal of goods is displayed worldwide by several companies. I believe that it has vital impacts on our choices. Furthermore, it has both positive and negative influences on our daily lives. There is a host of point as to why our products-selection is dependent on various handbills, posters, TV advertisements. Firstly, we are always looking for the latest manufacturings. Therefore, whenever companies produce any goods, they demonstrate those things on satellite channels, newspapers for appealing purchasers. Furthermore, sometimes, they guarantee. As a result, we believe their commitments and buy them. For example, a survey was conducted in India about a couple of months ago concerning how people choose their shoppings. Those Indians replied that they always followed the instructions of advertisements and commitments. On the other hand, although advertisements play a significant role to determine our necessities, it brings some conveniences and disadvantageous effects on our lifestyles. The prime opportunity is that we can cope up with the fashionable and technology-based world. Because, producers inform us regarding the most widespread and popular products. However, the principal drawback can be that individuals have the probability to be deceived. Because, there are a number of industries who supply second-hand products wittingly for more profit. So, if people buy them because of mesmerizing, they will be definitely abortive to posses their expected products. For instance, statistics demonstrated that, in Bangladesh, a quarter of citizens are happy to buy products according to advertising, but ten in one inhabitant is regretful for not having original products. To conclude, if we select products with validation, we will hardly be cheated. The essay discussed the view and put forward evidences why buying products in terms of attraction by company's advertisements will be advantageous as well as inconvenient impacts on our citizens.
Highlighting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
an influential method to attract customers. A great deal of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
is displayed
worldwide by several
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
. I believe that it has vital impacts on our choices.
Furthermore
, it has both
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positive
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
influences on our daily
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lives
.

There is a host of point as to why our products-selection is dependent on various handbills, posters, TV
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
.
Firstly
, we are always looking for the latest
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manufacturings
.
Therefore
, whenever
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
produce any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
, they demonstrate those things on satellite channels, newspapers for appealing purchasers.
Furthermore
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
, they guarantee.
As a result
, we believe their commitments and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
them.
For example
, a survey
was conducted
in India about a couple of months ago concerning how
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
choose their
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shoppings
. Those Indians replied that they always followed the instructions of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
and commitments.

On the other hand
, although
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
play a significant role to determine our necessities, it brings
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
conveniences and disadvantageous effects on our lifestyles. The prime opportunity is that we can cope up with the fashionable and technology-based world.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
, producers inform us regarding the most widespread and popular
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
.
However
, the principal drawback can be that individuals have the probability to
be deceived
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
, there are a number of industries who supply second-hand
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
wittingly
for more profit.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, if
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
them
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of mesmerizing, they will be definitely abortive to posses their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
.
For instance
, statistics demonstrated that, in Bangladesh, a quarter of citizens are happy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
according to advertising,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
ten in one inhabitant is regretful for not having original products.

To conclude
, if we select
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
with validation, we will hardly
be cheated
. The essay discussed the view and put forward evidences why buying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
in terms of attraction by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
's
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
will be advantageous
as well
as inconvenient impacts on our citizens.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay We live in a world in which we are constantly exposed to advertising. Discuss this issue and give your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
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