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"We have received some complaints directed to quality of catering at canteen from students.

"We have received some complaints directed to quality of catering at canteen from students. According to that problem survey blankets have given them to solve it. In the survey we covered such questions directed to know what kind of problems with catering they are experiencing, level of satisfying with our canteen and solutions or proposal they want to suggest. These problems were more common: very poor list of meals (49%), the lack of spoons and forks (32%) and lack of time to have a meal (19%). I would recommend to increase number of tableware, according to the number of students we have. We can help to count them by making another survey. Problem with lunch time should be considered with our administrators according to our school schedule. Another problem related to menu should be discussed with canteen cooks. Also, as proposal students asked lunchtime to be much earlier, because of school schedule. "
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We have received
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complaints directed to quality of catering at canteen from students. According to that
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problem
survey blankets have
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given
them to solve it.

In the survey we covered such questions directed to know what kind of
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problems
with catering they are experiencing, level of satisfying with our canteen and solutions or proposal they want to suggest.

These
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problems
were more common:
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very
poor list of meals (49%), the lack of spoons and forks (32%) and lack of time to have a meal (19%).

I would recommend to increase number of tableware, according to the number of students we have. We can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to count them by making another survey.
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Problem
with
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lunch time
should
be considered
with our administrators according to our school schedule. Another
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problem
related to menu should
be discussed
with canteen cooks.

Also
, as proposal students asked lunchtime to be much earlier,
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because
of school schedule.
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IELTS essay "We have received some complaints directed to quality of catering at canteen from students.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
152 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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