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"Lunchtime for students in our Nazarbayev Intellectual school going from 12: 30 pm to 12: 50 pm for first part of students and from 13: 30 pm to 13: 50 pm for second part of students.

"Lunchtime for students in our Nazarbayev Intellectual school going from 12: 30 pm to 12: 50 pm for first part of students and from 13: 30 pm to 13: 50 pm for second part of students. Everyday menu for children is varied for supporting interest of students every time. If consider the frequently requested meal for majority part is not main course, pea soup. Because of do not needed in compote children, most of them stay unfinished, students more prefer to drink a water. We’d like to ask you for more diversified menu and hot drinks. Especially, hot drinks help us to get invigorated in morning and be in positive. For almost 20 students one saucepan isn’t enough. For a morning more children want to eat a tasty breakfast, because they help to get more cheerful and joy. But, actually we are satisfied with a meal that prepare our cooks. We are grateful for their work! " "
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Lunchtime for
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students
in our
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Nazarbayev
Intellectual school going from 12: 30 pm to 12: 50 pm for
first
part of
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students
and from 13: 30 pm to 13: 50 pm for second part of
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students
. Everyday menu for children
is varied
for supporting interest of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
every time. If consider the
frequently
requested meal for majority part is not main course, pea soup.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
of do not
After the auxiliary verb 'do', use the base form of a verb. Did you mean "need"?
needed
in compote children, most of them stay unfinished,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
more prefer to drink
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "water".
a water
.

We’d like to ask you for more diversified menu and hot drinks.
Especially
, hot drinks
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
us to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
invigorated in morning and be in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
. For almost 20
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
one saucepan isn’t
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
. For a morning more children want to eat a tasty breakfast,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
more cheerful and joy.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
, actually we
are satisfied
with a meal that prepare our cooks. We are grateful for their work!
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IELTS essay "Lunchtime for students in our Nazarbayev Intellectual school going from 12: 30 pm to 12: 50 pm for first part of students and from 13: 30 pm to 13: 50 pm for second part of students.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
157 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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