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we can predict a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothing.

we can predict a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothing. 8dyml
Some people believe that we can predict a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothing. While I do admit that a person’s outward appearance tells a lot about them I do not completely agree with this view. It is possible to guess a person’s background and nature from their clothes (thesis). However, one may not be able to predict their character and values. A person always wearing religious or traditional costumes may reveal their devotional and spiritual nature. A usually decent and formally clad individual portrays simplicity and modesty. Multicolored and flashy outfits can indicate a person’s exuberant and lively nature (idea). For example, entertainers and celebrities are often seen wearing jazzy dresses (example). Also, an odd-colored, loosely-fitted and shabby clothing may be an indicator of a careless attitude (additional idea). Nevertheless, I feel that outward appearance and looks can be deceptive (antithesis). It may disguise a person’s true inner self and any malevolent intent (idea). For example, some imposters donning sacred robes and religious symbols may defraud innocent followers (example). This was evidently seen in the recent criminal cases filed against self-proclaimed saints in India. Moreover, a person’s choice of clothing cannot always be used as a reflection of their character in general. To cite an example, a woman wearing light and short clothes for her comfort may incorrectly be perceived as indecent in some countries. In summary, a person’s style of dressing can be an indicator of their thought patterns, and outlook towards life and culture. It can also show some of their qualities and attributes. However, it would be incorrect to draw a conclusion about someone based on their external appearance.
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culture and character from their

choice of clothing.
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outward appearance
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them I do not completely
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with this view.

It is possible to guess a
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person’s
background and nature from their clothes (thesis).

However
, one may not be able to predict their character and values. A
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always

wearing religious or traditional costumes may reveal their devotional and spiritual nature.

A
usually
decent and
formally
clad individual portrays simplicity and modesty. Multicolored

and flashy outfits can indicate a
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person’s
exuberant and lively nature (
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idea
). For

example, entertainers and celebrities are
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often
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seen
wearing jazzy dresses (example).

Also
, an odd-colored,
loosely
-fitted and shabby clothing may be an indicator of a careless

attitude (additional
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idea
).

Nevertheless
, I feel that outward appearance and looks can be deceptive (antithesis).

It may disguise a
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person’s
true inner self and any malevolent intent (
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idea
).
For example
,

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some
imposters donning sacred robes and religious symbols may defraud innocent

followers (example). This was
evidently
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seen
in the recent criminal cases filed against

self-proclaimed saints in India.
Moreover
, a
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person’s
choice of clothing cannot always be

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used
as a reflection of their character
in general
. To cite an example, a woman wearing

light and short clothes for her comfort may
incorrectly
be perceived
as indecent in
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some


countries.

In summary, a
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person’s
style of dressing can be an indicator of their
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thought
patterns, and

outlook towards life and culture. It can
also
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show
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some
of their qualities and attributes.

However
, it would be incorrect to draw a conclusion about someone based on their

external appearance.
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IELTS essay we can predict a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothing.

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