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We are happy to announce that Professor Fox will be filling the vacant Dean of Students position. Strong organizational skills are important for this position. Professor Fox has demonstrated such skills in her role as Head of the Philosophy Department, wh v.1

We are happy to announce that Professor Fox will be filling the vacant Dean of Students position. Strong organizational skills are important for this position. Professor Fox has demonstrated such skills in her role as Head of the Philosophy Department, wh v. 1
In the era of modern more and more people do research on the natural materials in order to many purposes. These natural resources such as oil, forests and freshwater are used by the people. In this way, some experts opine that the issue of natural resources is at an alarming rate. It creates many quandaries does its reasons. It is very necessary for solving these problems. I will not only explain the problems behind this, but also certain solution in the below paragraphs. Since the amount of technology is rising around the world, people tend to use that machineries, which consume oil. To illustrate, it is a part of the nature. It is a fact that if people vanish oils sources, they cannot able to approach again in the future for following generations. It generates pollution problems, like as impact on the environment. So people should always prefer to choose public transportation while travelling, which can be useful for them. Another solution is that, instead of the used oil based vehicles, they should opt battery motors. For example, all countries of the world consume oil machineries except for Japan, as scientists made many vehicles which consume energy or electricity. Moreover, forests are a vital part in the world. It is at that place where plants as well as animals are available. However nowadays, complete the needs of the humans they cut down trees and hunting the wild animals. All forests are hiding year by year. It makes the problems of global warming, which has become an alarming rate. It also effects on the life of a human. Consequently, it is very necessary for tackling the issue, people tend to work hard without cutting trees. To cite an example, I deem that, the government should make stronger laws that help to reduce the problems. And it also is an individual responsibility that people should grow the plant on the festival in order to remember the time with plants. In addition to it, another resource is fresh water. Water is a life. It is impossible to say that without the life is water. For instance, many industries and factories have launched. Another mimic is that, these leads to spread the rubbish in the rivers. For instance, it becomes a very dangerous for drinking. In some nations, where fresh water is very difficult for a finding. On the contrast, people should save the water, they should develop the small lakes, where they can save the water. Likewise, they must not waste the water. In agriculture, more farmers tend to use the water for growing their crops such as mostly in paddy. So they should consume the water in limit. To sum up, although half natural resource has lost in the era, yet it is very necessary for protecting these resources such as oils, forests and freshwater. So that people can be successfully save the materials for the upcoming generations.
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materials in order to
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purposes. These
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resources such as
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oil
,
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forests
and freshwater are
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people
. In this way,
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some
experts opine that the issue of
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natural
resources is at an alarming rate. It creates
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many
quandaries does its reasons. It is
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necessary for solving these
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certain solution in the below paragraphs.

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vanish
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sources, they
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to approach again in the future for following generations. It generates pollution
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, like as impact on the environment.
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people
should always prefer to choose public transportation while travelling, which can be useful for them. Another solution is that,
instead
of the
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used
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oil
based vehicles, they should opt battery motors.
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consume
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oil
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machineries
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except for
Japan, as scientists made
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many
vehicles which
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consume
energy or electricity.

Moreover
,
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forests
are a vital part in the world. It is at that place where plants
as well
as animals are available.
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nowadays, complete the needs of the humans they
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cut
down trees and hunting the wild animals. All
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forests
are hiding year by year. It
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makes
the
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problems
of global warming, which has become an alarming rate. It
also
effects on the life of a human.
Consequently
, it is
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very
necessary for tackling the issue,
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people
tend to work
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hard
without cutting trees. To cite an example, I deem that, the
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should
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stronger laws that
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. And it
also
is an individual responsibility that
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people
should grow the plant on the festival in order to remember the time with plants.

In addition
to it, another
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resource
is fresh
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water
.
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is a life. It is impossible to say that without the life is
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water
.
For instance
,
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many
industries and factories have launched. Another mimic is that, these leads to spread the rubbish in the rivers.
For instance
, it becomes a
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very
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dangerous
for drinking. In
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nations, where fresh
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water
is
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difficult for a finding. On the contrast,
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people
should save the
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water
, they should develop the
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small
lakes, where they can save the
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water
.
Likewise
, they
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must
not waste the
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water
. In agriculture, more farmers tend to
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use
the
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water
for growing their crops such as
mostly
in paddy.
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So
they should
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consume
the
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water
in limit.

To sum up, although half
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natural
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resource
has lost in the era,
yet
it is
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very
necessary for protecting these resources such as
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oils
,
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forests
and freshwater.
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So
that
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people
can be
successfully
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save
the materials for the upcoming generations.
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IELTS essay We are happy to announce that Professor Fox will be filling the vacant Dean of Students position. Strong organizational skills are important for this position. Professor Fox has demonstrated such skills in her role as Head of the Philosophy Department, wh v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
486 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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