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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer-based technology. How do you think it will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely so much on computers? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer-based technology. How do you think it will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely so much on computers? 2dmw
It would be difficult to imagine life without computers. Over recent years in particular, their use and potential have grown at an incredible rate and I strongly believe that this growth will continue as more innovative ways to use them are developed. Although there are definitely some downsides to their use, I do believe the positives outweigh the negatives. In conclusion, I believe we will probably become more dependent on computers but that our lives will improve as the technology improves. While there is a negative side to such a dependency, there are many more positives that we can focus on.
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, their
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and potential have grown at an incredible rate and I
strongly
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use
them
are developed
. Although there are definitely
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downsides to their
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, I do believe the positives outweigh the negatives.

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become more dependent on computers
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as the technology
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. While there is a
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side to such a dependency, there are
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more positives that we can focus on.

IELTS essay We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer-based technology. How do you think it will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely so much on computers?

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