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We all work, or will work, in jobs with many different kinds of people. In your opinion, what are some important characteristics of a co-worker (someone you work closely with)? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

We all work, or will work, in jobs with many different kinds of people. In your opinion, what are some important characteristics of a co-worker (someone you work closely with)? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
Work is part and parcel of our life. Our parents used to work hard to provide our needs and raise us, some day we will do the same. By entering the adulthood, a person starts to learn more about responsibility, and then choose a career. Actually, we spend one third of our life working; all over the world, people usually work eight hours a day. Colleagues contribute a major part of our social life and we spend a considerable part of our life with them. Among abundant important qualities for a co-worker, I choose tolerance, cooperation and sensitivity for more discussion. To begin with, nowadays, the world culture is being united and people from various parts of the world live and work together. Hence, we associate individuals with different backgrounds, cultures, and personalities in our daily life. In order to get along with each other, one should be tolerant. A worker’s common behavior may seem rude to another employee from a distinct culture. Therefore, tolerance serves a useful purpose. Besides being tolerant, co-workers should be cooperative and assist each other at any situation. We live in the age of technology and industry in which job and market competition is getting more and more intense every day. In a perceptive view, one will realize that teamwork is the most vital element leading to victory in this severe battle between businesspersons. If all employees collaborate, the overall efficiency of the company will be increase. Let’s take a typical example; a cooperative colleague is willing to change his schedule to accommodate another employee’s emergency. What could be more desirable than that? In final glance, an excellent co-worker is someone who is sensitive. This admirable characteristic could revolutionize the professional relationships and the milieu. If everyone treats others sensitively, no tension and contention will exist at office. For example, a sensitive person does not brag about his intelligence by speaking loudly about his innovative ideas or his great job and making other employees look dumb. All in all, good co-workers can enhance our social and professional life significantly, as we spend a major portion of our life with them. To be more impartial, people might posit other qualities for a good co-worker; but to me, sensitivity, cooperation, and tolerance are the three main characteristics for an excellent colleague.
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to learn more about responsibility, and then choose a career. Actually, we spend one third of our
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working; all over the world,
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people
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eight hours a day. Colleagues contribute a major
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with them. Among abundant
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qualities for a
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co-worker
, I choose tolerance, cooperation and sensitivity for more discussion.

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with, nowadays, the world culture is
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people
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, one should be tolerant. A worker’s common behavior may seem rude to another
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employee
from a distinct culture.
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, tolerance serves a useful purpose.

Besides
being tolerant,
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co-workers
should be cooperative and assist each
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other
at any situation. We
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live
in the age of technology and industry in which job and market competition is getting more and more intense every day. In a perceptive view, one will realize that teamwork is the most vital element leading to victory in this severe battle between businesspersons. If all
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collaborate, the
overall
efficiency of the
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company
will be increase.
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’s take a typical example; a cooperative colleague is willing to
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his schedule to accommodate another
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emergency. What could be more desirable than that?

In final glance, an excellent
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co-worker
is someone who is sensitive. This admirable characteristic could revolutionize the professional relationships and the milieu. If everyone treats others
sensitively
, no tension and contention will exist at office.
For example
, a sensitive person does not brag about his intelligence by speaking
loudly
about his innovative
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ideas
or his great job and making
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other
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employees
look dumb.

All in all,
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good
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co-workers
can enhance our social and professional
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with them. To be more impartial,
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people
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to me, sensitivity, cooperation, and tolerance are the three main characteristics for an excellent colleague.
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IELTS essay We all work, or will work, in jobs with many different kinds of people. In your opinion, what are some important characteristics of a co-worker (someone you work closely with)? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
384 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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