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Both the reading and the lecture talk about ways to reduce the salinity from the lake in order to save the fish population. The reading proposes three ways that can help desalinate the lake's water. However, the lecture disputes the ideas given in the passage. The professor said that it will be great if we can stop water's salinity and save the fish, but those methods proposed by the author of the passage are unrealistic or not practical. To begin with, the author of the reading said that first choice is to remove the salt from the water in specific facilities for desalination. He said that water can be heated, evaporate into steam, then cooled down and return into the lake leaving the salt behind. This particular idea was challenged by the professor. She said that water evaporation will cause other health issues. When water evaporates, besides the salt it can leave behind other toxic chemicals that can be harmful for people's life. for example, she said it can leave selenium, and if people will breathe it it can be so dangerous for their health. Furthermore, the reading part suggested that they can bring ocean water inside the lake to dissolve the salt. Yet, the lecture does not agree with this proposal. It said that bringing water inside the lake requires pipelines and they are so expensive to build considering the long distance of 100 000 kilometers, and the government may not have enough founds to support this. Finally, the author of the passage said that one solution can be controlling the water's salinity by constructing walls that can help separate the water in couple sections. On the other hand, the lecturer opposes this proposal. She said that the walls are unlikely to work for long time. She said that if an earthquake may occur it will destroy the walls and the water will be mixed again.
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and the lecture talk about ways to
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reduce
the salinity from the
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in order to save the fish population. The
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proposes three ways that can
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help
desalinate the lake's
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, the lecture disputes the
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ideas
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in the passage. The professor said that it will be great if we can
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water's salinity and save the fish,
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those methods proposed by the author of the passage are unrealistic or not practical.

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with, the author of the
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said that
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choice is to remove the
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salt
from the
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water
in specific facilities for desalination. He said that
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water
can
be heated
, evaporate into steam, then cooled down and return into the
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lake
leaving the
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salt
behind. This particular
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idea
was challenged
by the professor. She said that
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evaporation will cause other health issues. When
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evaporates,
besides
the
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Furthermore
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part suggested that they can bring ocean
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inside the
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lake
to dissolve the
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salt
.
Yet
, the lecture does not
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agree
with this proposal. It said that bringing
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inside the
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requires
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pipelines and
they are
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so
expensive to build considering the long distance of 100 000 kilometers, and the
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government
may not have
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founds to support this.

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, the author of the passage said that one solution can be controlling the water's salinity by constructing walls that can
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help
separate the
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in couple sections.
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destroy
the walls and the
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will
be mixed
again.
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IELTS essay water salinity

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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