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Smartphones have caused more harm than good in our society

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There is not doubt that we live in an era where using the technology is unevitable. Smartphones are one of the most devices people use nowadays and they have been tremendously helpful for everyone. I feel this way some some reasons that I will explore in the following essay. To begin with, mobile phones helps us to saty conected with our friends and family. They makes us feel closer to each other, even though we might live far away. I hold this idea due to my personal experience. I live in United Stated, while all of my family are back in my hometown which is Albania. Sometimes, when I am homesick I can call my brother or my mother and talk to them and after I speak with them I feel more relaxed and happy. The phone also helps me to stay conected with my friends all over the place by using social media like facebook. We share our lives there, like pictures, events and many more and that way we do not miss everyone a lot. If we would not be able to somehow comunicate with our loved one, we would have been more deppressed and unhappy. So, the phones contributed in maintaining our phsycological health in a good shape. Furthermore, the smartphones play a significant role for our school assigments. I have downloaded the school application in my phone and I can look every anouncement that the university can make in terms of class locations, mid terms and much more. Also, I use the phone to read for my exams as I can save the textbooks in there and I have them with me all the time. When I am at work, during the break time I study for my mid terms using the phone. We also have a stydy group in skype with my classmates where we share ideas for every subject. As you can see there are numerous benefits that you can get only by using your smartphones. In conclusion, I feel that moble devices are the most useful advent that people can possibly have. I would say that technology have made everyone's live easy and joyful.
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nowadays and
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this way
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reasons that I will explore in the following essay.

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with, mobile
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makes
us
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closer to each other,
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far away. I hold this
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due to my personal experience. I
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in United Stated, while all of my family are back in my hometown which is Albania.
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Sometimes
, when I am homesick I can call my brother or my mother and talk to them and after I speak with them I
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feel
more relaxed and happy. The
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phone
also
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me to stay
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conected
with my friends all over the place by using social media like
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facebook
. We share our
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there, like pictures,
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and
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more and that way we do not miss everyone a lot. If we would not be able to somehow
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comunicate
with our
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one, we would have been more
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deppressed
and unhappy.
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So
, the
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phones
contributed in maintaining our
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phsycological
health in a
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shape.

Furthermore
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assigments
. I have downloaded the school application in my
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and I can look every
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anouncement
that the university can
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in terms of
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locations,
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mid terms
and much more.
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to read for my exams as I can save the textbooks in there and I have them with me all the time. When I am at work, during the break time I study for my
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mid terms
using the
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group in skype with my classmates where we share
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there are numerous benefits that you can
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by using your smartphones.

In conclusion
, I
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moble
devices are the most useful advent that
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can
possibly
have. I would say that technology have made everyone's
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easy and joyful.
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IELTS essay Smartphones have caused more harm than good in our society

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
361 words
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