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Water is a natural resources that should be free. Government should ban the sale of bottled water. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Water is a natural resources that should be free. Government should ban the sale of bottled water. v. 1
There is a general believe by some people that government ought to place embargo on sales of water in bottled form since water exists naturally. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this assertion and I believe having drinkable water available to all is a form of business that comes at a cost. To start with, there is a cost implication attached to making consumable water available to all and for this reason, bottled water should be sold. To illustrate further, aqua, though widely available in the universe in form of streams, rivers, oceans, rains amongst others, is most times not good for consumption in its natural form. Purification of this natural resources involves a lot of processes such as, filtration, carbonation and mineralization, which comes at a cost. Hence, it becomes necessary for organizations involved in providing hygienically consumable water to charge people for the service rendered. Furthermore, selling of bottled water is a form of entrepreneurship and means of generating income for some people. For instance, in Nigeria, availability of few jobs and fierce competition in the job market means many unemployed people have to think outside the box and settle for other means of survival. As a result, Sales of bottled water present many with an opportunity to generate income since there is a constant demand for drinkable water. This is a viable business as long as quality of the water supplied and the safety of the people are not being compromised in a bid to make profit. In conclusion, availability of hygienically drinkable water in a bottle is not free and sales of it provides an avenue for people to generate income, government should therefore, not place an embargo on it.
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some
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people
that
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government
ought to place embargo on sales of
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water
in bottled
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form
since
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water
exists
naturally
. In my opinion, I
strongly
disagree with this assertion and I believe having drinkable
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water
available to all is a
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form
of business that
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comes
at a cost.

To
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start
with, there is a cost implication attached to making consumable
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water
available to all and
for this reason
, bottled
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water
should
be sold
. To illustrate
further
, aqua, though
widely
available in the universe in
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form
of streams, rivers, oceans, rains amongst others, is most times not
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good
for consumption in its natural
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form
. Purification of this natural resources involves
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a lot of
processes such as, filtration, carbonation and mineralization, which
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comes
at a cost.
Hence
, it becomes necessary for organizations involved in providing
hygienically
consumable
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water
to charge
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people
for the service rendered.

Furthermore
, selling of bottled
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water
is a
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form
of entrepreneurship and means of generating income for
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some
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people
.
For instance
, in Nigeria, availability of few jobs and fierce competition in the job market means
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many
unemployed
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people
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have to
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think
outside the box and settle for other means of survival.
As a result
, Sales of bottled
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water
present
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many
with an opportunity to generate income since there is a constant demand for drinkable
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water
. This is a viable business as long as quality of the
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water
supplied and the safety of the
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people
are not
being compromised
in a bid to
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make
profit.

In conclusion
, availability of
hygienically
drinkable
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water
in a bottle is not free and sales of it provides an avenue for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to generate income,
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government
should
therefore
, not place an embargo on it.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
One should not aim at being possible to understand but at being impossible to misunderstand.
Marcus Fabius Quintilian

IELTS essay Water is a natural resources that should be free. Government should ban the sale of bottled water. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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