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The overuse of Natural resources can cause an ultimate exhaust of them. This causes a huge harm to the environment. Should the government discourage people from the overuse of natural resources? Agree or Disagree v.1

The overuse of Natural resources can cause an ultimate exhaust of them. This causes a huge harm to the environment. Should the government discourage people from the overuse of natural resources? Agree or Disagree v. 1
In modern society, shopping is the daily routine of the family. While some people are of the opinion that it is all time advantage to purchase local products, I believe that does not always have a positive effect to buy those products On the one hand, people argue that it is always useful to buy local products because they think that it has many benefits Firstly, the local products are readily available in the market compared with the other stock of availability. Secondly, the price of the products tends to be cheaper and eco-friendly to the people who are all living their lifestyle under budget. Finally, there is less possibility for a chance to product mismatch. Almost considerably with the other marketing products. For example, In 2019, times of India reported that people those who are all buying local products are increased by 20℅ as compared with the previous year 2018 On the other hand, I believe that purchasing local products could not be an ideal option due to a few reasons. Firstly, the quality of the product cannot match the branded one, though the price is cheaper in the market. This implies a consequence of poor standard and life span of the products would not be more. Secondly, Though it is cheaper, there was an increased rate for duplication of product in local markets. If the products are worth in quality, there would be lots of consumer who love to buy the products. Finally, Some products lack the guarantee and warranty option and this dearth affects the stock. Because people want to exchange and replace the damaged material which they brought from the local market. For instance, In 2016, A study conducted by Cambridge University has found that 70℅ of costumers who are all not satisfied with their recently purchased product. In conclusion, I completely disagree that purchasing the local products cannot be an all time advantage
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some
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are of the opinion that it is all time advantage to
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purchase
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local
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products
, I believe that does not always have a
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positive
effect to
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buy
those products

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people
argue that it is always useful to
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buy
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local
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products
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because
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think
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benefits
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local
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products
are
readily
available in the
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market
compared with the other stock of availability.
Secondly
, the price of the
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products
tends to be cheaper and eco-friendly to the
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people
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who
are all living their lifestyle under budget.
Finally
, there is less possibility for a chance to
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product
mismatch. Almost
considerably
with the other marketing
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products
.
For example
, In 2019, times of India reported that
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people
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who
are all buying
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local
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products
are increased
by 20℅ as compared with the previous year 2018

On the other hand
, I believe that purchasing
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local
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products
could not be an ideal option due to a few reasons.
Firstly
, the quality of the
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product
cannot match the branded one, though the price is cheaper in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
market
. This implies a consequence of poor standard and life span of the
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products
would not be more.
Secondly
, Though it is cheaper, there was an increased rate for duplication of
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product
in
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local
markets. If the
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products
are worth in quality, there would be lots of consumer
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products
.
Finally
,
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Some
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products
lack the guarantee and warranty option and this dearth affects the stock.
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Because
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people
want to exchange and replace the damaged material which they brought from the
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local
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market
.
For instance
, In 2016, A study conducted by Cambridge University has found that 70℅ of costumers
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who
are all not satisfied with their recently
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purchased
product.

In conclusion
, I completely disagree that purchasing the
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local
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products
cannot be an
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all time
advantage
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The overuse of Natural resources can cause an ultimate exhaust of them. This causes a huge harm to the environment. Should the government discourage people from the overuse of natural resources? Agree or Disagree v. 1

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
317 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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