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Visit to farm and meet friends

Visit to farm and meet friends eK0Jx
Today is the beautiful day to go and visit the farm near my city. I woke up early today and very excited for to go to farm. In farm we can have so much fun, Free food and meet all my dear friends there. We all were planning to meet for many weeks today finally we will see each other and talk about our childhood memories. I am making my special recipe salsa and nachos for them. I know what my friends are bringing too. They all will comes with their children and wife's. My wife is also very exited to meet her friends at the gathering. We all are like family members and we have so much fun and joy. Our kids loves to play in the farm. The farm us so big and has so many different types of plants and vegetables grown there.
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near my city. I woke up early
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Free food and
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all my dear friends there. We all were planning to
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each other and talk about our childhood memories. I am making my special recipe salsa and nachos for them. I know what my friends are bringing too. They all will
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her friends at the gathering. We all are like family
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much fun and joy. Our kids
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IELTS essay Visit to farm and meet friends

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
146 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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