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vaccination for children is essential or dangerous

vaccination for children is essential or dangerous YB6YB
There is no doubt that vaccinations are extremely important for children for several diseases. While there are many benefits of immunizing children against preventable diseases, there are also risks for some diseases. I will agree with this opinion. As suggested by the doctor, children under 6 years old do not have a full immune system. Therefore, doctors recommend taking a certain vaccine. For instance, chickenpox, fever are diseases that need to be vaccinated for children. Fevers, common colds, and coughs do not require vaccination. Based on the body's immunity, doctors will recommend vaccination. The government will provide most vaccines for children based on seasonal diseases. On the other hand, for common diseases, there is no need for vaccination. If you are vaccinated, your child's immunity will decrease, which is bad. For example, if the child is tired and has a fever, there is no need to vaccinate because it is very dangerous for the child. Therefore, you need to wait two to three days to take medicine to cure the fever. If the temperature is constant in children, consult a doctor and ask for medication, not vaccination because there have been some recorded instances of children, unfortunately, reacting adversely to their injections. Therefore, you should use the medicine as prescribed and do not take the child for vaccinations without the doctor’s permission. In conclusion, vaccination is necessary for seasonal diseases but not necessary for common diseases. I agree that vaccinations are necessary for children and need to improve the immune system.
There is no doubt that vaccinations are
extremely
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important
for
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children
for several
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diseases
. While there are
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many
benefits of immunizing
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children
against preventable
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diseases
, there are
also
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risks
for
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some
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diseases
. I will
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agree
with this opinion.

As suggested by the
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doctor
,
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children
under 6 years
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old
do not have a full immune system.
Therefore
,
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doctors
recommend taking a certain vaccine.
For instance
, chickenpox,
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fever
are
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diseases
that
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need
to
be vaccinated
for
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children
.
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Fevers
, common colds, and coughs do not require vaccination. Based on the body's immunity,
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doctors
will recommend vaccination. The
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government
will provide most vaccines for
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children
based on seasonal diseases.

On the other hand
, for common
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diseases
, there is no
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need
for vaccination. If you
are vaccinated
, your child's immunity will decrease, which is
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bad
.
For example
, if the child
is tired
and has a
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fever
, there is no
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need
to vaccinate
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because
it is
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very
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dangerous
for the child.
Therefore
, you
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need
to wait two to three days to take medicine to cure the
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fever
. If the temperature is constant in
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children
, consult a
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doctor
and
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ask for
medication, not vaccination
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because
there have been
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some
recorded instances of
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children
, unfortunately, reacting
adversely
to their injections.
Therefore
, you should
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use
the medicine as prescribed and do not take the child for vaccinations without the
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doctor’s
permission.

In conclusion
, vaccination is necessary for seasonal
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diseases
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but
not necessary for common
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diseases
. I
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agree
that vaccinations are necessary for
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children
and
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need
to
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improve
the immune system.
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IELTS essay vaccination for children is essential or dangerous

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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