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Vaccinating children against preventable diseases is not only unnecessary but also dangerous. To what extent do you agree or disagree v.4

Vaccinating children against preventable diseases is not only unnecessary but also dangerous. v. 4
There is no doubt about vaccination is very important to children for some of the diseases. While there are many benefits to getting vaccination of children against preventable diseases and also dangerous to some of the diseases. I would agree with the former view. According to the doctor's suggestion, children who are less than 6 years, they do not have a sufficient immunity system. So doctors suggest to do the certain vaccination. For example, chicken pox, dengue, malaria kind of diseases need to do shots for kids. Normal fever, cold and cough does not require any vaccination. Based on the immunity power of the body, doctors will suggest for the vaccination. The government will provide most of the vaccinations for children based on the seasonal diseases. On the other side, for a normal disease or regular diseases are not required any vaccination. If you go for the vaccination, children's immunity power will reduce. Based on the white blood cells, immunity power will calculate. For example, children will get tired and got fever with this case no need to go for vaccination and it's a danger to kids. So here you need to wait for two to three days to take to cure the fever. If it is continuously the same temperature for children, then consult a doctor and take require medicine not for the shots. You should use prescribed medicine. At the conclusion, vaccination is necessary for seasonal diseases and contaminations and unnecessary for normal diseases. I agree for inoculation is necessary for kids and need to improve the immune system.
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for
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some of the
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diseases
. While there are
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benefits to getting vaccination of
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children
against preventable
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diseases
and
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dangerous
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some of the
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diseases
. I would
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agree
with the former view.

According to the doctor's suggestion,
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children
who are less than 6 years, they do not have a sufficient
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immunity
system.
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doctors
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suggest to do
the certain vaccination.
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, chicken pox, dengue, malaria kind of
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diseases
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need
to do shots for kids. Normal fever,
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cold
and cough does not require any vaccination. Based on the
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immunity
power of the body, doctors will suggest for the vaccination. The
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government
will provide most of the vaccinations for
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children
based on the seasonal diseases.

On the other side, for a normal
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disease
or regular
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diseases
are not required any vaccination. If you go for the vaccination, children's
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immunity
power will
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reduce
. Based on the white blood cells,
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immunity
power will calculate.
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,
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children
will
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get
tired and
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got
fever with this case no
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need
to go for vaccination and it's a
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danger
to kids.
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So
here you
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need
to wait for two to three days to take to cure the fever. If it is
continuously
the same temperature for
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children
, then consult a doctor and take require medicine not for the shots. You should
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use
prescribed medicine.

At the conclusion, vaccination is necessary for seasonal
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diseases
and
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contaminations
and unnecessary for normal
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diseases
. I
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agree
for inoculation is necessary for kids and
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need
to
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improve
the immune system.
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IELTS essay Vaccinating children against preventable diseases is not only unnecessary but also dangerous. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.5
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