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The passage asserts that Greek navies used a waepon named burning mirror to attack their enemies which it was made from a polished copper surface to focus sun's rays abd set enemies' ships on fire and provides three reasons of support. The lecture, on the contrary, debunks this passage' claim and says that the mentioned reasons provided by the passage is unconvincing. First, the article claims that Greeks were not able to create an advanced mirror, since it needs a mirror with high power to intensify sunlight and it should be a parabolic shape. The professor casts doubt on this view by saying that people of ancient Greek need to use small pieces of copper to concentrate sunlight. They nevr use a single parabolic shape piece. Second, the ships were made from wood and burning wood with a burning mirror needs about ten minute and ships are moving, since a burning mirror no longer is able to burn ships, according to the reading. The lecture repudiates this point by explaining that ancinet Greek people used some material to make ships water proof named pitch, so ships just need a few secons to burn and the burning mirror set ships on fire quickly. Third, the author of the passage imparts that there was no need to create a mirror in ancient time, since Greeks had flaming arrows which were affective to set ships on fire. The professor disavows this idea by reasoning that flaming arrow was easy to observe, since they needed a device to focus sun's rays no linger be seen by enemy, as a result a burning mirror is magical and effective than flaming arrows.
The passage asserts that
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Greek
navies
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used
a
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waepon
named
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burning
mirror to attack their enemies which it
was made
from a polished copper surface to focus sun's rays
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abd
set enemies'
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ships
on fire and provides three reasons of support. The lecture,
on the contrary
, debunks this passage' claim and says that the mentioned reasons provided by the passage is unconvincing.

First
, the article claims that Greeks were not able to create an advanced mirror, since it
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needs
a mirror with high power to intensify sunlight and it should be a parabolic shape. The professor casts doubt on this view by saying that
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people
of ancient
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Greek
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need
to
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use
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small
pieces of copper to concentrate sunlight. They
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nevr
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use
a single parabolic shape piece.

Second, the
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ships
were made
from wood and
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burning
wood with a
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burning
mirror
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needs
about ten minute and
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ships
are moving, since a
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burning
mirror no longer is able to burn
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ships
, according to the reading. The lecture repudiates this point by explaining that
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Greek
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people
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material to
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ships
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water proof
named pitch,
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ships
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need
a few
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secons
to burn and the
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mirror set
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ships
on fire
quickly
.

Third, the author of the passage imparts that there was no
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need
to create a mirror in ancient time, since Greeks had flaming arrows which were affective to set
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ships
on fire. The professor disavows this
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idea
by reasoning that flaming arrow was easy to observe, since they needed a device to focus sun's rays no linger be
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seen
by enemy,
as a result
a
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burning
mirror is magical and
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effective
than flaming arrows.
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IELTS essay using weapon

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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