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Controvey exists over whether people should select any career is proposed to them right away than wait for ter proposed a favorable job in future. Whereas some may hold the opinion that choosing a job at the first time is wise decision, while others adhere an opposite direction. However, I would rather to voteon the later point of view in that not only does technology provide more pleasant career, but also by empowering knowledge people have more job opportunities than past. The first factor which is convincing enough to favor the later point of view is that technology in these days has created numerous jobs for all people. In fact, it is must be emphasized that significant role of technology can never be neglected, since it has penetrated to every minute and every corner of human' life. Technology has a splindid role to make jobs regarding to human's needs which people no longer need to work in boring and unfavorabel job. Take a a company which provides diverse services in the Internet field as an example. This company needs a lot of people to worl in different sectors with different personality and academic level. One working in this company is able to accomplish numerous task regarding to the wireless, reparation of labtop, computers, hence he never needs to get a job opportunity even it is secure. A further aspect which is worth to be mentioned here is that knowledgable' people are more than past. It is not irrational that academic level provides more job opportunities for people. Indeed, after graduation from academic organization and the university, a student is proposed various careers in his specific field because he is able to work with private comapanies, since he is professional in some skills both practically and theorically. A very tabgible example to illustrate this argument could be a engineer who has professional skills in business mark. He has equiped with highly effective techniques to find job and to increas money from potential customers, therefore he does not need any secure job becasue he is able to establish his own business and compete with numerous invividulas and companies in the world. As a result he never accepts a job secure since he can work on his favorable jon and be successful to improve his economic comdition. Taking into account all aforementioned factors we safely arrive at the conclusion that nowdays people no longer take a secure jon when it is proposed to them because with advent of technology many careers are made for individuals and academic level of new generation helps them to work in a favorable job. It is high time we stopped the fact overlooking that get a secure job right away is not only option for people.
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exists over whether
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people
should select any
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career
is
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proposed
to them right
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away
than wait for
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ter
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proposed
a favorable
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job
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in future
. Whereas
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some
may hold the opinion that choosing a
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at the
first
time is wise decision, while others adhere an opposite direction.
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, I would
rather
to
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voteon
the later point of view in that not
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only
does
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technology
provide more pleasant
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career
,
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but
also
by empowering knowledge
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people
have more
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job
opportunities than past.

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first
factor which is convincing
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enough
to favor the later point of view is that
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technology
in these days has created numerous
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jobs
for all
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people
. In fact, it is
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must
be emphasized
that significant role of
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technology
can never
be neglected
, since it has penetrated to every minute and every corner of human' life.
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Technology
has a
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splindid
role to
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make
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jobs
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human's
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needs
which
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people
no longer
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to
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work
in boring and
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unfavorabel
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job
. Take
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a a
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company
which provides diverse services in the Internet field as an example. This
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company
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needs
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worl
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sectors with
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personality and
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academic
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company
is able to accomplish numerous task
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the wireless, reparation of
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labtop
, computers,
hence
he never
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needs
to
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a
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opportunity even it is secure.

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further
aspect which is worth to
be mentioned
here is that
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knowledgable
'
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people
are more than past. It is not irrational that
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academic
level provides more
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job
opportunities for
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people
.
Indeed
, after graduation from
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academic
organization and the university, a student is
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proposed
various
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careers
in his specific field
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a
engineer who has professional
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skills
in business mark. He has
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equiped
with
highly
effective techniques to find
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job
and to
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increas
money from potential customers,
therefore
he does not
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secure
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job
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becasue
he is able to establish his
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own
business and compete with numerous
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invividulas
and
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companies
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As a result
he never accepts a
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job
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secure
since he can
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work
on his favorable
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and be successful to
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improve
his economic
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comdition
.

Taking into account all aforementioned factors we
safely
arrive at the conclusion that
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nowdays
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people
no longer take a
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secure
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jon
when it is
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to them
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with advent of
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technology
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many
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careers
are made
for individuals and
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academic
level of new generation
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helps
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work
in a favorable
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. It is high time we
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stopped
the fact overlooking that
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a
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secure
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right away is not
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only
option for
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people
.
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IELTS essay take a job opportunity or wait

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
458 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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