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Using the points and examples from the lecture, explain the two pricing strategies described by the professor. v.1

Using the points and examples from the lecture, explain the two pricing strategies described by the professor. v. 1
Although many specialists affirm that successful sports careers depend on the strength and fitness of the player, many others think that mental attitude is the key to success in sport competitions. In this essay, I will discuss both standpoints and explain why I think mind attitudes are the essence of triumph whereas the body aptitudes are not as important. Some sport trainers claim that the key to success is being strong. Furthermore, trained and firm muscles can make you faster and able to overcome the challenges of any game. For instance, basketball players need to be strong to jump high and run fast without getting injured at the end of every match. Accordingly specialists agree that strength is are the main attribute needed to earn the most medals. In contrast, it is stated by many, that mental attitudes are much more important than the body fitness. Henceforth, mind training and planning strategies ahead of games are essential skills for the purpose of earning fame in the sports environment. For example, last paper on strategies for sports claims that volleyball players usually plan strategies for every different part of the match and follow these steps during the actual game. Moreover, these strategies make them feel confident and empowered. Therefore the mental attitudes are skills needed not only for mental health but also for sports fame. In conclusion, while some would attribute sports achievements to being fit and strong, there are many others which consider that it is a matter of mental preparedness. In my opinion, both sides should be considered thoroughly, because it is useless to be strong if the game is not strategically planned. Nevertheless, the most important characteristic to succeed in sports is mental attitude as there is no body to work with if the mind is not at place.
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careers depend on the strength and fitness of the player,
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others
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mental
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attitude
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competitions. In this essay, I will discuss both standpoints and
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explain
why I
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mind
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attitudes
are the essence of triumph whereas the body aptitudes are not as
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important
.

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trainers claim that the key to success is being
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strong
.
Furthermore
, trained and firm muscles can
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make
you faster and able to overcome the challenges of any game.
For instance
, basketball players need to be
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strong
to jump high and run
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fast
without getting injured at the
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end
of every match.
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that strength is are the main attribute needed to earn the most medals.

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mental
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are much more
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than the body fitness. Henceforth, mind training and planning
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strategies
ahead of
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are essential
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skills
for the purpose of earning fame in the
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environment.
For example
, last paper on
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for
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sports
claims that volleyball players
usually
plan
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strategies
for every
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different
part of the match and follow these steps during the actual game.
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, these
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make
them feel confident and empowered.
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the
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mental
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attitudes
are
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skills
needed not
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health
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fame.

In conclusion
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would attribute
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achievements to
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strong
, there are
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others which consider that it is a matter of
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preparedness. In my opinion, both sides should
be considered
thoroughly
,
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if the game is not
strategically
planned.
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characteristic to succeed in
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sports
is
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attitude
as there is
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no body
to work with if the mind is not at place.
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IELTS essay Using the points and examples from the lecture, explain the two pricing strategies described by the professor. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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