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Nowaday people throw away old things and adapt new things. Do the disadvantages of throwaway society outweigh any possible ecomic advantages. v.1

Nowaday people throw away old things and adapt new things. Do the disadvantages of throwaway society outweigh any possible ecomic advantages. v. 1
Purchasing habits have changed. Nowadays, people prefer to buy goods on the internet, and this trend increasing gradually. I personally think that benefit of shopping online surpasses its drawbacks. I am going to debate both idea and explain my own reasons to support the idea which is buying things on the Web has more advantages than its disadvantages. First of all, the Web provides a wide range of options about almost anything. People can compare goods that they need as quality and price. Furthermore, buyers can read reviews about things and service that presented by the seller. That can help on buyers purchase decision. For example, whoever wants to buy a cell phone can easily confuse among different varieties of selections. The easiest way to prevent this confusion is using a ranking website that compares and align smartphones after dozens of objective tests. Secondly, buyers can obtain their needs without a geographic dependence. They can carry out their purchases from all over the World because of the internet. On the other hand, there are some disadvantages of shopping online such as possible credit card frauds and cyber security threats. However, it should not be forgotten that many banks fulfill insurance to compensate such unwanted issues. Another disadvantage of the internet shopping can be unexpected delays in cargo delivery. But many online shopping companies like Amazon provides 24 hour delivery guarantee to its customers. In conclusion, buying stuff on the Web reached to an unprecedented level and it is still growing because its benefits outweigh its disadvantages.
Purchasing habits have
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changed
. Nowadays,
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people
prefer to
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buy
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goods
on the internet, and this trend increasing
gradually
. I
personally
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think
that benefit of
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shopping
online surpasses its drawbacks. I am going to debate both
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idea
and
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explain
my
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own
reasons to support the
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idea
which is buying things on the Web has more advantages than its disadvantages.

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First of all
, the Web provides a wide range of options about almost anything.
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People
can compare
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goods
that they need as quality and price.
Furthermore
, buyers can read reviews about things and service that presented by the seller. That can
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help
on buyers
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purchase
decision.
For example
, whoever wants to
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buy
a cell phone can
easily
confuse among
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different
varieties of selections. The easiest way to
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prevent
this confusion is using a ranking website that compares and align smartphones after dozens of objective
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tests
.
Secondly
, buyers can obtain their needs without a geographic dependence. They can carry out their
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purchases
from all over the World
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because
of the internet.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
disadvantages of
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shopping
online such as possible credit card frauds and cyber security threats.
However
, it should not
be forgotten
that
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many
banks fulfill insurance to compensate such unwanted issues. Another disadvantage of the internet
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shopping
can
be unexpected
delays in cargo delivery.
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But
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many
online
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shopping
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companies
like Amazon provides
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24 hour
delivery guarantee to its customers.

In conclusion
, buying stuff on the Web reached to an unprecedented level and it is
still
growing
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because
its benefits outweigh its disadvantages.
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IELTS essay Nowaday people throw away old things and adapt new things. Do the disadvantages of throwaway society outweigh any possible ecomic advantages. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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