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Using the examples of the Venus flytrap and the sundew, describe two ways that carnivorous plants get their nutrients. v.1

Using the examples of the Venus flytrap and the sundew, describe two ways that carnivorous plants get their nutrients. v. 1
Because it is pertinent for children to know the distinction between good and bad on time, punishment is commonly viewed as a useful vehicle required to achieve this objective. In my opinion, I completely agree with this viewpoint that punishing children is vital to teaching them to distinguish what is wrong from what is right. The manner of punishment I advocate for erring children are reprimanding them verbally and denying them certain privileges over a period of time. I believe punishment is a viable tool that is necessary in training a child to differentiate between what is acceptable and inappropriate in society. The compelling reason for this is because when children receive punishment for doing something that is wrong, they instinctively put in effort to make amends as it feels wrong to continue in that way, knowing it will attract similar reaction the next time they repeat such action. Thus, learning from their own experience of how unpalatable punishments are, they subconsciously decide not to tow that path again. One major punishment I recommend to parents and tutors for their wards, which is needed to raise children that are able to tell the difference between good and bad, is through scolding them when necessary. In other words, whenever children do something stupid, parents should not excuse them, but rather constructively use words to correct them. Meanwhile, words are especially potent in this guise as they are capable of helping to mould character. Children want their parents approval and praise, and if they are not given, they make a conscious effort to earn it by doing what will get them in their parents’ good book. Furthermore, depriving children of some privileges, which they used to enjoy, when they misbehave is another effective way of teaching them the difference between right and wrong. For instance, depriving teenagers of that extra vacation or game time because they have betrayed their guardians’ trust through sheer act of disobedience has been shown by research to work, considering children will always do things that would afford them the luxury of enjoying these occasions. In conclusion, it is often thought that punishment is a veritable way to correct children in order to learn to separate good from evil. It is my view that this is absolutely imperative because it gives them the personal experience that will equip them to make right choices. Although there are various punishments that could work, verbally correcting children and depriving them of some benefits are two leading approaches of actualizing this goal without causing any harm to their young impressionable minds.
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to know the distinction between
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on time,
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punishment
is
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agree
with this viewpoint that punishing
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children
is vital to teaching them to distinguish what is
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wrong
from what is right. The manner of
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punishment
I advocate for erring
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children
are reprimanding them
verbally
and denying them certain privileges over a period of time.

I believe
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punishment
is a viable tool
that is
necessary in training a child to differentiate between what is acceptable and inappropriate in society. The compelling reason for this is
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when
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children
receive
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wrong
, they instinctively put in effort to
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make
amends as it feels
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wrong
to continue in that way, knowing it will attract similar reaction the
next
time they repeat such action.
Thus
, learning from their
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own
experience of how unpalatable
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punishments
are, they
subconsciously
decide not to tow that path again.

One major
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punishment
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parents
and tutors for their wards, which
is needed
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children
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and
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, is through scolding them when necessary.
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children
do something stupid,
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parents
should not excuse them,
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rather
constructively
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words to correct them. Meanwhile, words are
especially
potent in this guise as they are capable of helping to
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character.
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Children
want their
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parents
approval and praise, and if they are not
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given
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make
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book.
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, depriving
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children
of
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some
privileges, which they
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used
to enjoy, when they misbehave is another effective way of teaching them the difference between right and
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wrong
.
For instance
, depriving
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teenagers
of that extra vacation or game time
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because
they have betrayed their guardians’ trust through sheer act of disobedience has
been shown
by research to work, considering
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children
will always do things that would afford them the luxury of enjoying these occasions.

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, it is
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thought
that
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punishment
is a veritable way to correct
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children
in order to learn to separate
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good
from evil. It is my view that this is
absolutely
imperative
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because
it gives them the personal experience that will equip them to
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make
right choices. Although there are various
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punishments
that could work,
verbally
correcting
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children
and depriving them of
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some
benefits are two leading approaches of actualizing this goal without causing any harm to their young impressionable minds.
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IELTS essay Using the examples of the Venus flytrap and the sundew, describe two ways that carnivorous plants get their nutrients. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
429 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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