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using a private car instead of public transportation

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The issue of using a private car instead of public transportation in several countries has grown in importance over the past few decades. In this essay, I will analyze the causes of this problem and purpose some possible solutions. With regard to causes of using a private car, Unreliable public transportation system and overcrowding this type of transport are the major causes of this problem. Nowadays, people are usually restricted by the schedule, and also it is important to reach their destinations on time. Due to the delay of most public vehicles and their unavailability, they often use their car to commute so as to avoid that problem. At the same time, this type of transportation often suffer from overcrowding, especially during rush hours. As a result, people are more willing to use their own car for transportation. For instance, in my country Iran, due to some reasons, women should be in a separate section in bus or metro, where have less space compared with men's section and it is annoying. However, City planners and transport officials can play their part by investing money in the public transportation system to ensure that reliable and frequent public transport is available for each citizen. Moreover, governments can also improve this situation by invest some money in order to develop infrastructure and provide more vehicles or trains to facilitate public transportation. Therefore it can help to provide more space and reliable transport for passengers. In conclusion, using more private cars by people will only be solved if governments and authorities pay more attention to improve the public transportation system by investing money so as to improve and reliability of that.
The issue of using a private
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in several countries has grown in importance over the past few decades. In this essay, I will analyze the causes of this problem and purpose
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some
possible solutions.

With regard to causes of using a private
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car
, Unreliable
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public
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transportation
system and overcrowding this type of
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transport
are the major causes of this problem. Nowadays,
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people
are
usually
restricted by the schedule, and
also
it is
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important
to reach their destinations on time. Due to the delay of most
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public
vehicles and their unavailability, they
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often
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use
their
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car
to commute
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avoid that problem. At the same time, this type of
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suffer from overcrowding,
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people
are more willing to
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own
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for
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, in my country Iran, due to
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some
reasons, women should be in a separate section in bus or metro, where have less space compared with
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men
's section and it is annoying.

However
, City planners and
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transport
officials can play their part by investing money in the
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public
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transportation
system to ensure that reliable and frequent
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public
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transport
is available for each citizen.
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,
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governments
can
also
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improve
this situation by invest
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some
money in order to develop infrastructure and provide more vehicles or trains to facilitate
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public
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transportation
.
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it can
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help
to provide more space and reliable
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transport
for passengers.

In conclusion
, using more private
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cars
by
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people
will
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only
be solved
if
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governments
and authorities pay more attention to
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improve
the
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public
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system by investing money
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improve
and reliability of that.
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IELTS essay using a private car instead of public transportation

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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