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Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal. v. 1
It is argued that usage of mobile phones while driving tends to make the driver distracted, which makes it a life threat due to which cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal. This essay agrees with this statement because the usage of cellular devices causes accidents to occur and also make the diver distracted due to which he/she cannot concentrate on the road. Fatal accidents occur when the driver is using a mobile phone hands-on texting or receiving a call at his/her eyes are not on the road and might not be able to see if there are any occurrences or chances of accidents ahead. They may crash into a tree or a roadblock or even another human. By doing this they put other people's lives in danger as well as their own lives in danger. Recent research concluded that about 20% of car crashes occur because the driver was using a cellular device while driving. While driving, the person driving can be easily distracted if they are using a mobile phone to communicate with someone. The busy corporate life tends to make employees' minds heated during a conversation or any personal issues may cause mental harm due to which the operator may get unfocused and lose the ability to drive safely. A recent study found that many car crashes occur because the mental stability of the driver was harmed during a conversation which made them lose focus. It’s better to arrive late rather than not arriving to that emergency call. There is nothing more important than your precious life as compared to an emergency call. In conclusion, use of cell phones should be made illegal while driving. The consequences include the dangerous effect on health, financial stresses and injuries.
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is argued
that usage of mobile
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phones
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make
the
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driver
distracted, which
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makes
it a life threat due to which cell
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phone
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use
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drivers
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agrees
with this statement
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because
the usage of cellular devices causes accidents to
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occur
and
also
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make
the diver distracted due to which he/she cannot concentrate on the road.

Fatal accidents
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occur
when the
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driver
is using a mobile
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phone
hands-on texting or receiving a call at his/her eyes are not on the road and might not be able to
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see
if there are any occurrences or chances of accidents ahead. They may crash into a tree or a roadblock or even another human. By doing this they put other
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people
's
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lives
in
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danger
as well
as their
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own
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lives
in
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danger
. Recent research concluded that about 20% of car crashes
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occur
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because
the
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driver
was using a cellular device while driving.

While
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driving
, the person
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driving
can be
easily
distracted if they are using a mobile
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phone
to communicate with someone. The busy corporate life tends to
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make
employees' minds heated during a conversation or any personal issues may cause mental harm due to which the operator may
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get
unfocused and lose the ability to drive
safely
. A recent study found that
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many
car crashes
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occur
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because
the mental stability of the
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driver
was harmed
during a conversation which made them lose focus.

It’s better to arrive late
rather
than not arriving to that emergency call. There is nothing more
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important
than your precious life as compared to an emergency call.
In conclusion
,
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use
of cell
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phones
should
be made
illegal while
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driving
. The consequences include the
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dangerous
effect on health, financial
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stresses
and injuries.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Using a cell phone while driving is dangerous because it causes the driver to become distracted. Therefore, cell phone use by drivers should be made illegal. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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