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Today people are travelling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v.3

Today people are travelling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v. 3
Nowadays, touring different countries has become popular among the people than ever before. It is happening because people want to take time out of their fast daily routine and when they travel to other parts of the world, it helps them to get to know the different people from different cultures who spoke different languages. More and more people are travelling to the other parts of the world to take some relaxation out of their daily routine. Because recreational activities help people refresh their minds and to focus on their work or studies better that is why people want to travel whenever they get a chance and that is the reason the ratio of travelling has increased a lot in past years. For example, a recent survey of the University of Delhi shows that the tourist ratio who travels to India every year has increased about 30% in last 10years. The main advantage of travelling is that the people get to know the different cultures and different languages that are spoken in other parts of the world. And travelling teach them how to respect others cultures and their traditions. It also helps them in learning different languages and know their history. For instance, different languages are spoken after every 100km in Pakistan and that show that when travelers come to Pakistan they get to meet many type of people. In conclusion, people are travelling more than ever before because they do not get enough time for relaxation in their daily routine and travelling help them to refresh their mind so they can focus better on their work or studies later.
Nowadays, touring
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different
countries has become popular among the
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. It is happening
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because
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people
want to take time out of their
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fast
daily routine and when they travel to
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other
parts of the world, it
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helps
them to
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get
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different
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people
from
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different
cultures who spoke
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different
languages.

More and more
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people
are
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travelling
to the
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other
parts of the world to take
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relaxation
out of their daily routine.
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recreational activities
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help
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people
refresh their minds and to focus on their work or studies better
that is
why
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people
want to travel whenever they
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get
a chance and
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the reason the ratio of
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travelling
has increased a lot in past years.
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, a recent survey of the University of Delhi
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shows
that the tourist ratio who travels to India every year has increased about 30% in last 10years.

The main advantage of
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travelling
is that the
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people
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get
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cultures and
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in
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other
parts of the world. And
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travelling
teach them how to respect others cultures and their traditions. It
also
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helps
them in learning
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different
languages and know their history.
For instance
,
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different
languages
are spoken
after every
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100km
in Pakistan and that
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that when travelers
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come
to Pakistan they
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get
to
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meet
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many type
of
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people
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In conclusion
,
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are
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more than ever
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before
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because
they do not
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get
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enough
time for relaxation in their daily routine and
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travelling
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help
them to refresh their mind
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so
they can focus better on their work or studies later.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Today people are travelling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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